ISAAC's OC REVIEWs

Dimitri J. Jackson [E]

Please note that I ask a lot of questions throughout the review, you by no means have to answer them, they are simply to get you thinking more in-depth about your character. Enjoy!

Fandom: Original (takes place in present day; the real world.)

Full name: Dimitri James Jackson

[ Yep, that's fine. Definitely fixed that 'damn-it-ree/tree' issue.]

Nickname: 'Dee' (His friend xavier calls him that when he gets shy and doesn't want to talk much.)

Species: Human

Age: 20

Height: 6'3

Weight: 190 pounds

[ All is well.]

Gender: Male

Sexuality: Bisexual

Nationality: American

Appearance: Has light blue eyes and dark brown hair which he dyed black.

[ When and why did he dye his hair black? If it's because he thought it was cool like with the way he dresses, just let us know. 'After finding old photographs of his dad with black hair, [X year old] Dimitri felt inspired by his father's appearance chose to try his father's old style out for himself.' Or you know, something like that, preferably written with a little more creativity than that.]

He has two tattoos, one being an upside down pentagram and the other being numerous lines criss crossing down to his left elbow. he has three piercings, a lip ring, and eyebrow bar, and one right below his lip. He usually wears a band t-shirt, black jeans, his battle vest (incase you don't know, a battle vest is usually a denim vest that, mainly, has metal band patches sewn onto it), and platform boots or combat boots.

Appearance (mainly why he looks that way): He has long hair because he really never cut it when he was younger as his parents didn't care much about it. His tattoos don't really mean anything crazy or important. They just came from his friend being bored and deciding to try to tattoo on him. He dresses the way he does because he always saw his dad and his friends dress like that when he was little. He thought it was cool to look that way.

[ This is fine, although think about mentioning his skin and the length of his hair, you did in 'Damitri' but not in Dimitri. In addition to that, think about his facial features, have a look at this link, it's got a few phrases that might help you in writing his features.

< https://www.bryndonovan.com/2015/06/16/master-list-of-physical-descriptions/ >

Now you've got the reasons behind his appearance you can start to fit it into his actual appearance section, rather than having two separate paragraphs with different headings. The easiest and arguably most organised way of going around this would be stating something about his appearance then follow it with the reason.

For example, 'He has two tattoos, {tattoo description}. His tattoos don't really mean anything crazy...']

Personality: Is always determined to get things done, whether it be music wise or just something simple. He's like this because he wants to be successful in life.

[ What does success look like to Dimitri? What's his goal?]

He is a very loud and can, unintentionally, be/look intimidating. (This is most accurate to strangers who'll just see him in the streets or in the place he works.)