ISAAC's OC REVIEWs

Ellie Dacoly [F]

Please note that I ask a lot of questions throughout the review, you by no means have to answer them, they are simply to get you thinking more in-depth about your character. Enjoy!

Fandom: Was originally in the Undertale fandom but later became fandomless but is in a story I'm making and is both a side and main character.

[ Forgive me if I'm wrong, but I don't think a character can be both a side and main. Perhaps you're meaning she's the deuteragonist, a secondary main character. Other than that, perhaps just mention where and when your story is set. ]

Full Name: Ellie Dacoly

Age: 23

Gender: Female

Sexuality: (Disaster) Pan Ace

[ I'm not quite as knowledgeable when it comes to the vast variety of sexualities, however, I was under the impression in most asexual cases you couldn't have 'sexual' in both words, because it'll be a contradiction.

If you say Alex {for example} is heterosexual meaning he's sexually attracted to the opposite sex, and then you say he's asexual, so he's without sexual feelings. Can you see the issue? He can't really be both, the same could be said for Ellie, she can't be both pansexual and asexual.

She can, however, be panromantic and asexual, that would be fine and one way to fix the issue. Of course she may be demi-something, but I'm not 100% sure myself when it comes to the demi sexualities or whatever they are called, so I'm not going to dive too deeply into that, perhaps its something you could look into in your own time and adjust Ellie's sexuality as you see fit.]

Species: Human

Nationality: Half Philippine (Mom) Half American (Dad)

[ I think you're getting mixed up with ethnicity or something similar. Nationality, in layman's terms, is the country you come from, the country where you are a legal citizen. Of course, nationality can get much more complex than that, but for simplicity just think of nationality as being the country you were born in.

Seeing as Ellie's backstory mentions nothing about having a dual-citizenship, or the country she was born in for that matter, her nationality would presumably be either Philippine or American depending on the country she was born in. ]

Appearance:

[ I'm sad I didn't get to use my BMI calculator with this one. What's her height and weight?]

Blind [blonde?] hair in a ponytail that's being held by a red bow, olive skin, left eye blue right eye green,

[ Congenital or Acquired? Acquired heterochromia can appear just as fascinating as congenital, however, it often signposts the eye as being damaged. It's still a fun idea right though?

Don't ask me the specific details or about the actuality of this causing heterochromia but maybe at some point in her training, she used to an adventurer like you, but then took a sword to the eye {I'm not apologising for that, that was comedy gold.} The trauma to her eye made some 'next science thing' happen, and now she's got dodgy vision but sick looking eyes.

An alternative to the sword injury maybe it happened in the car accident in her early life... or you know maybe it's just congenital and I'm getting way to into an idea again. ]

has no right elbow and below, wears a pink v-shirt with a white undershirt, dark blue jeans, and light grey shoes, optional iron sword.

[ How does she carry the sword when her hands are full? Hip, back, somewhere else? When she has her sword does she keep it concealed, or does she wear it openly? ]