ISAAC's OC REVIEWs

Estelle Odaal [C]

This OC and review briefly mention child abuse, if you're uncomfortable with the topic, I suggest overlooking Ellie's fear and relationship sections.

Please note that I ask a lot of questions throughout the review, you by no means have to answer them, they are simply to get you thinking more in-depth about your character. Enjoy!

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Grammar: Yes, please for grammar checks. It can never hurt, only help.

[ You will notice a few crossed out words and added words throughout the review, they serve as the 'spellcheck'. Crossed out words {words with are unbolded and underlined}, would equate to words that I {and literary software} think should be removed and words within square brackets are what we think should be added.]

Fandom: Original- Ellie lives in the kingdom [of] Idywen (this story is in the Fantasy genre), where her family has ruled for hundreds of years. They are descended from Magicians or those with magical abilities.

Name: Estelle Odaal

Nickname: Ellie, because it was her ancestor, Elsbith's nickname. Since Elsbith is considered somewhat of a savior, many members of her family choose to give their daughters the nickname Ellie.

[ Lovely, how does Ellie feel about the history for her nickname?]

Age: 16

Gender: Female

Sexuality: It's not a big part of the story or anything (actually I don't think I even mentioned it), but Ellie's asexual.

Species: Mostly human, although part Magician, from a far back ancestry.

Nationality: N/A, because her homeland is made-up.

[ You've made up the homeland, just make up a nationally for that land. Idywenese?]

Appearance: Ellie is quite small for her age, described as having a child-like body, similar to a twelve-year-old's, even at age 16.

[ Petite then perhaps. How tall is she and what does she weigh? If I'm going to guess, I'll guess she'd be around 4'8" {146.4cm} to 5' {152.4cm] and weighing in at somewhere around 90lbs {41kg} have a healthy weight for the two potential heights.]

She has raven brown hair, blue eyes, and very pale skin, all of which are typical features of her family.

[ What are her facial features like? What's her hair styled like?]

Personality: Ellie is the kind of person who doesn't have her own personality, truly, because she is always changing it into something that ingratiates her to others. With her brother, she is timid, meek, and submissive, while with Sky, she is more outspoken, questioning, and fiery. One thing that remains constant is [that] she has a lot of anger stored up within her, mostly directed towards her brother. She is not afraid to lie to others as well, as long as it helps her get what she wants. But at the same time, she's sensitive, and has an aversion to violence, unless it involves the death of her brother, in which case, she's all for it.

[ Personalities don't change, they are mostly set in stone. The traits can change, shift, or be developed to meet the needs of the situation, that's stupidly common, I'm certain everyone does it to some degree without even realizing. The way you are at home isn't going to be the same way you are at school or work, traits will take over other traits because maybe you're boss or teacher is on your arse about some work that they need you to do. To sum that up, that you've said is almost correct, rather than the personality changing it'll be the personality traits doing the shifting and moving about and it's more of an outside influence causing the change in traits rather than Ellie actually doing it herself, it's like a knock on effect.