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In a world where magic abounds and every human can use magic, Cydney Yen is an unfortunate anomaly--she is what people call a "magic less freak".
Lyn Bronte, on the other hand, is a talented lightning mage and an up-and-coming quester--someone who takes up quests against magical monsters and beings. When she discovers Cydney's hidden ability to perform magic on very specific items, she recruits her into her questing team. Little does she know, Cydney harbors a dangerous secret that will threaten to wreck both their lives.
A light-hearted story of adventure, love, and inevitable heartbreak. Perfect for fans of Naruto, Fairy Tail, and isekai stories.
Review Proper
A. Blurb
The blurb did a good job introducing us to the main characters, Lyn and Cydney. It's also done to get the reader's sympathy for Cydney being a magic-less freak in a world full of magic-users. It introduces a hint of the conflict, the stakes, and the world.
My problem, though, is that the stakes described as "dangerous sercret that will threaten to wreck their lives" sounded a bit...vague? Having read the whole story, the meat of the conflict just isn't in the blurb. I think (just me and my dumb opinions) that introducing a little bit more into what that "dangerous secret" is and how it could "threaten to wreck both their lives" could help strengthen your blurb and incite more hype about the story itself.
It's also good that you're providing comp titles but the last bit came off as a run-on sentence and sounded a bit off. xD Nothing a good line edit wouldn't fix but yeah. It's best to edit the flow of the last two sentences to "pack a punch", so to speak. Right now, I'm looking at a reason for peeps to click on the book but not enough reason to hype.
Also, a not-so-useful tip from me and my personal preference in blurbs, try to lessen the use of pre-emptive phrases like "little did she know" or anything along those lines. What it does is dictate to the readers what you want them to know instead of letting them figure out what the plot or the characters have to do with the secrets and stuff you're setting up in the story.
My DMs, whether in Discord or in Wattpad are open in case you want to get more help and clarifications about this. xD
B. Setting
What can I say? This is one of the best worldbuilding I've ever seen. The thought that comes with it, the vastness, and the sheer cleverness of the concepts explained is something I wished I was able to do with my first series. xD
The descriptions are spot-on. I never really have any complaints about how the scene painting was done, including how the characters interact with the setting. The details planted are good and well-done. uwu.
