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What I loved: I loved how easy-going this story is. The themes tackled and even the whole plot are handled very well. It is also very clean, with minimal typos, grammar errors, and other technical stuff that could get in the way of reading. I love the wit, the heart, and the message it aims to deliver. The dialogue is also on point, with not a filler in sight. Every scene leads to the advancement of the plot and that is a very, very good job done. Character dynamics and the conflict is also great and realistically handled. Overall, it's a pretty solid story.
What didn't work: There's really not much that didn't work. Instead, I'll use the next section to point out some stuff that I noticed.
What to improve: The first and foremost thing that I noticed is that this story seemed to be suffering a case of character soup. There are just too many characters in a single book and their arcs are all vying for the attention of the plot, which would lead to some aspects to be rushed, skipped, or just not exist. I saw these problems with Jayce, Henry, and Jacob. It seemed like the story would be fine even if they are not there. It would have been nice if they have some sort of added external conflict to the plot but that wasn't the case. It's not really bad but it does provide your reader clutter and more names to remember. The general rule of thumb is to never add a character that doesn't contribute anything to the plot by their active choice.
Next, and probably the last, thing I'd like to note is that the character voice falls a little bit flat. I don't know if it's because of the telling and info-dumping done to forward the scene or from something else. I really don't know how to fix this beyond talking note of how your MC speaks and how she sees the world through her own eyes.
Final verdict: This is 8/10 on my scale. It's a solid read, a good one, too, with a lot of lessons to learn about life, grief, and moving on. Keep writing. Keep improving. You're on the right track! :))
