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Saniya25shah - The Choices of Destiny

Title: Choices of Destiny
Chapters Read: 4/4
Score: 1/10

INTRODUCTION
Choices of Destiny is a book with so much potential overshadowed with cheap romance, poor dialogue, and poor detailing.

What I LIKED about your book:
I appreciate that you can differentiate the characters from each other and give them distinct personalities

What I DIDN'T LIKE about your book:
First of, let's start with the detailing. There is none to little detailing on this book. When there is, the detailing goes to the characters emotions and none to world-building. The characters' emotions and thoughts are all too directly detailed too. Instead of narrating the scene, you feed it up to the readers. Which, to my opinion, removes the fun out of every book I can possibly read.

There's also a problem with the dialogue. Most of the dialogue came out awkward and artificial, mostly because of the void use of body language when describing them. I have witnessed lines of dialogue without a single detail in scenery, emotions, and body language and trust me, it's hard to enjoy a book when it looks like you're reading a script.

Now let's talk about characters. I'm sorry but yes you gave them distinct personalities but on some scenes, they're just too positively done that they look like those cardboard cutouts. The MC in particular, was overdid. He's too perfect that it's hard to relate to him. Readers engage with characters they can relate to, that's a feature you should try practicing on okay!

The plot became boring too because of the lack of details. It's just hard to visualize anything happening in the story.

CONCLUSION
This boom has a lot of potential. You have the potential and I believe in that potential. Don't give up in writing! There's still plenty of space for improvement.