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tell_cersei - 39 Days Left to Live

Title: 39 Days Left to Live
Chapters read: 5/5
Score: 5/10

INTRODUCTION:
39 Days Left to Live is an intriguing tale of kidnapping and mystery. A story that sets out normal first but twists it's flow unpredictably. A decent story, though it obviously lacks in creativity and uniqueness when it came to the narrative.

What I LIKED about your book:
Even though the book's clearly focused on the kidnapping, I didn't really expect it to happen so fast and sudden. This was a good plot device as it's not only unpredictable, but also piqued my interest and curiosity to read and indulge your story more. From that point onwards, the plot just spirals on many narrow paths that screams enigmas, and obviously, I'm interested to know the answer to these enigmas!

You've also created your character on point with modern standards. You've portrayed Chris' sexuality with authenticity, the difficulty of being accepted. Another characteristic was Chris' jealousy towards Richard, which was easily interpretable, though confusing at some points regarding his stand on what he truly feels about the subject, given that Richard and him is very close.

You've detailed scenery and your characters quite well. The effort you exerted for these visuals are commendable too! The visuals  makes the flow of the story less confusing and direct, though removes our ability to build the scenes with our own imagination.

What I DIDN'T LIKE about your book:
The narrative is the biggest problem here on my opinion. So you've chosen a first-person narrative. Most of the details are, although great, is being directly fed to the reader.

Directly-feeding details to the reader kinda removes the artistic value for me when it came to scene building. It's like a cheap or lazy tactic to ease up one's works. Directly-feeding these feels like an information dump more like reading a story.

There were also some instances that the metaphors are just kinda bizarre and irrelevant. When it came to details, every single one should be relevant to the story and it's flow, lest it becomes and sound like word fillers and thus, sounding awkward. Body language description was also quite lanky at some points, either over-exaggerated or lacking in energy.

CONCLUSION:
The book was enjoyable and readable though honestly, the narrative just bothers me.

Also, when you chose a first person POV, stick to that POV. Don't try to combine first and third person POVs; it'll just make your story more confusing.

Anyways, I like how creatively put together the plot is, how you will surprise us in the future, I definitely want to know.

Keep writing!