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sdaniel325 - Food Poisoning

Title: Food Poisoning
Chapters Read: 8
Score: 7/10

INTRODUCTION:
Food Poisoning is definitely a well-written tale about four best friends who made a life-altering decision: to eat salad for lunch. It's definitely a humorous story beautifully detailed in a dynamic narrative between our four male characters as they struggle to cope with the changes of eating contaminated food for lunch.

What I LIKED about your book:
I must say that I adore your writing style. It's descriptive and incredulous and surprisingly, it's not too wordy given on how much effort you have put on details. You've thoroughly balanced giving away info and word fillers, which resulted in the story's smooth flow and narration.

It made me wonder how you switched narratives without being confusing. It's clearly astounding that you rapidly switch between four different perspectives yet the story still remains comprehensible and definitely entertaining, while ensuring that each point of narration remains relevant and loyal to the direction of the story itself, often leading to many developments in not only the plot, but the characters themselves.

But what truly deserves praise here is how authentic your portrayal of these 4 people's friendship. As they acted amusingly, joked and poked fun at each other, it gives me this sense that these people would actually work and would truly be friends if ever they were real. You gave them respective personalities too, ensuring that each member of the group is unique in their own personal way, though clearly I sympathized with Andre instantly, given that his efforts in the group remains unnoticed as he'a portrayed as the 'perfect' boy.

You also established the conflict and the direction of the plot early on the story. Complete with subtle hints in the main characters' lives, these factors served as great hooks in the story. Normally, I don't find myself hooked into the story until I persisted into the climax but this sure hooked me into it since it's premise.

What I DIDN'T LIKE about your book:
There are minor things that I would like to discuss regarding this.

First would be the amount of irrelevant details. Although you've created a beautiful writing style, I've still noticed that there were instances that there were incredible amounts of word fillers that made the selection quite boring to read.

There was also a lacking when it came to emotions and body language. It's not a big deal but there were just moments where there were a lacking in emotions and body language that would've made the scene more appealing. But rest assured, your scenes has these, there are just some that doesn't.

Scenery wasn't thoroughly represented here also. I've found small regards to scenery and that's it. It's hard to picture a scene without a sliver of a detail given to the scenery.

CONCLUSION;
I've read chapters only because I'm way behind my review schedule but I definitely plan to read further.

Your story is absolutely entertaining and unique at it's own and I instantly fell in love with your boys, they're the sweetest, most chaotic boy group ever and I love it.

Great job on Food Poisoning though, it clearly deserves the praise.