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SmileyyFace101 - A Mystery Novel

Title: A Mystery Novel
Chapters read: 5
Score: 1.5/10

INTRODUCTION:
A Mystery Novel starts with a cliche set-up and continues on with a standard and predictable storyline. An unauthentic plot layered with weird, overreacting characters, a very confusing narrative, spoon-fed details, and poorly built twists definitely made this book's 'mystery' quite disappointing.

What I LIKED about your book:
Perhaps what I liked about this us that your representation of grief somewhat had an emotional impact at points.

What I DIDN'T LIKE about your book:
Let's start from highest to lowest.

The characters are very cartoonish. They don't cling to a constant mood as it rapidly changes from grief to sorrow to happiness or whatever. They also tend to have an overly dramatic reaction on certain occurrences that wouldn't have deserved such. The emotions were not properly described and the main characters typically stuck to this goal, often forgetting any more pressing issues that they should be facing instead of leaning towards this goal of theirs. The characters' dialogues sounded very artificial too, thus, adding points to their cartoonish personas. Lastly, their relationships with each other are very confusing.

The details are always lacking either through relevant information or color, or both. Most of the early chapters revealed background information that wasn't relevant to either the scene or the pace of the story. The lack of information and color in the scenes made them not only boring but senseless as well, it's like reading through a book with blank pages, given that the words of the story don't really convey the plot and thus, it's pages might as well be blank.

The story's pacing was so fast that it not only made the story more perplexing but also very uninteresting. The rapid changes in time don't really let you hook yourself into the story, for the moment you try to tether yourself, it's already gone off into another direction.

The huge amount of characters introduced into the story at such a small span of chapters without proper orientation really lost their chance to be likable for me. These characters were literally thrown into the story without an introduction that resulted in a confusing mass of conflicting personalities that not only made them annoying and overreacting characters but also removed the possible chemistries that they had for each other.

I've also noticed a huge amount of grammatical errors, especially when it came to tenses and a little about punctuation.

CONCLUSION:
First of all, sorry for the harsh review, I try my best not to be brutal but as I believe, the duty should be done with honesty.

I believe in improvement. There's definitely lots of space for improvement!

Practice your writing more. Read different books to familiarize yourself with writing styles, keep practicing.

We all started from the bottom, no one starts from the top, but only those who persevere finishes on the top.