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ThejTThomas - Rise of the Earth's Aboriginals

Title: Rise of the Earth's Aboriginals
Chapters read: 5
Score: 3/10

INTRODUCTION
Rise of the Earth's Aboriginals is an epic sci-fi story complete with a great premise and an interesting cover, though it's plot and character not only failed to impress, but also was confusing at points.

What I LIKED about your book:
The writing here is decent, at least. The details are actually superb, especially with the dream sequence at chapter two. You've also followed the guidelines when it came to writing, and aced them.

What I DIDN'T LIKE about your book:
Everything is confusing. First we know about this Dictator that you've made sound important and relevant to the story, though wasn't shed some light on. I'm sorry if he's ever brought up on the later chapters, I was too bored to read on. You should've emphasized him/her more when it was earlier, even a slight insight into what his actions were that made him so fearsome and villainous.

Tiara also enrolls on a prestigious school but ends up on a juvenile prison sort of thing? It was quite confusing from this point on. Like, why would her parents subject her to this?

The dialogue of the characters was quite artificial at some points too, alternating from a teenager to somewhat childish in a mere moment. 

I'm sorry if I didn't read on further and no offense but I was just too bored to continue on with the story. It lacked action and forced unnecessary details into the story that wasn't explained or even acknowledged.

CONCLUSION
Just like every book, this one has potential. Your English is great and so is your detailing, it's just your story's structure that is the problem in your story.

Try hiring an editor to help you. Anyways, keep practicing! Practice makes perfect always remember that!