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Review: Heartless Monster

Reviewer: Minty or -sugaistic-

Review For: 1-800-JinsDadJokes

So...this story was based on the purge. Instead of the normal 12-hr long purge, the founding fathers decided on a 36 hour long purge to finally get rid of
the poor.

So, in my opinion, the plot was a pretty creative one. I liked the general idea. The action and the fight scenes in the book were amazing! I liked how you
explained the scenes with great detail.

The characters in the story were diverse. Each had its own unique personality. For example, Jungkook had a moody and tough personality that
showed he wasn't one to show weakness. He acted mostly on impulse, and had a big temper. You could tell that the drugs and deaths had an affect on him. As the story continued, the characters developed more and more.

The grammar and punctuation was okay. Maybe a few typos here and there. Try re-reading your chapters or get
an editor.

To sum it up:
Overall, your book was amazing. I don't think it lacked in any department. The
only thing that bothered me was that there wasn't much info about Y/N. It just personally bothers me that instead of a name most authors put in 'y/
n'. The nationality of the main female character was unknown. Most info was very cloudy. Try making an actual personality instead of y/n. It kinda ruins the whole experience.

One thing though:
Don't let my or anyone else's opinion
discourage you from writing.
Keep up the good work!

Thank you for requesting here!