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must say the title “Posnidea” is unique and throws a vibe of some mystery and power, though your cover lets down the image of your title it does not represent your plot in the story. The cover doesn't justify or portray any kind of voyage or mystery vibe. So I suggest you to look up for better covers as honestly that's what attracts 80% of the readers. On wattpad there are many platforms that will help you with it, or we do the same too.
I found your blurb simple and short which is quite interesting as people usually keep a very long blurb but I think short one does have a better impact though, I suggest you to improvise or reconsider some lines to arouse more inquisitiveness in your fellow readers.
I must say; I liked the way you have put efforts for the quotes at the start of every chapter but, I suggest you that it would be great if you maintain hooks in your story too. Personally, I wish that the hooks could have been more impressive as that is what makes the reader keen to read ahead.
I must say that you do have some grammatical errors and comas that are misplaced here and there which can be neglected but if you rectify them, it could really increase the professionalism of your writing, apart from that it would be more amazing if you use a bit more adjectives it will help you to enhance your story more like a cherry on the cake.
Honestly, I liked your plot as the female protagonist; portrays a smart, bold, confident and vigilant personality. I liked the way you wrote it as if it's a movie scene going on right in front of you looks like you connect to the waters but I would like if you had given Miven a bolder name even though its beautiful and the feelings that are portrayed by her are good but just try to put a bit more of emotions. I like that its not like other cliche stories where Gawain (The guy) expresses the way he feels for her they carry an unspoken bond that lies in between the way he encourages her and knows her pain, its beautiful and I must say you have written pretty well from a third point of view not everyone can do it right but because it's a third point of view, I think it kind of lacks the emotional connection which is needed to connect to the characters more if you try to be more descriptive about the intensity of the emotions it will do great. And I hope that you keep writing as it is your first book and I also wish you a good luck! 😁
