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Let's begin with this!
Honestly, when I first saw the cover, my initial thoughts were something around the lines of calling it adorably cute but when having read the blurb I just got to know badly I misunderstood it. By this I mean that; the cover is undeniably good and I can't help but think that the mushy adorableness oozing out of it has some sort of comical sense to it. And my dear if that is something that you've wanted to portray than you've got it absolutely right!
Personally, never in my life had I heard anything of basketball players having long fingers so that's some GK right there for me! But seriously, there couldn't have been anything better than "Fingers" that would justify the plot of your story or fanf*ck as you like to call it!
I liked how you've kept your readers engaged throughout, be it your puns or humorous conversations between characters, I couldn't spot a dull aspect through any of it. Your writing style does seem a bit distant though, since the story has about 8-9 characters, at some points it was a bit difficult for me to understand who was who, since you have had the readers jump straight to the scenes without establishing a proper connection to any of them. I don't mean that you write long paragraphs about all of them but a few personal or emotional traits about each and everyone of them could really help with creating a clearer picture.
Trust me when I say that; I don't want to say this but I really liked the way the words were purposely misspelled in the texts they shared. It was downright interesting! But I would suggest that you do look into the main writing part of the story and improvise the grammatically weak sentences and some of the spelling mistakes. It would really enrich the quality of your book.
The relationship between the boys was something that I found very endearing. But unfortunately, since the story was extremely fast paced I couldn't get anything much about their personalities at the beginning. I suggest you take your time in explaining scenes in the story, be intensely descriptive about the characters and their college surroundings, it would really bring out the realistic feel but make sure that you do so without hampering the humorous aspect of the book.
The plot of your story is thoroughly enjoyable, you just need the proper words to make it stand out more effectively and I believe that you most certainly have it in you to make the necessary changes.
And damn! I must say; you have an oddly good sense of humor!
