Chloe's Book Reviews {CLOSED/ HIATUS}

Friendships And Other Disasters

Username: pour-me-some-liquor 

Genre: Romance, Teen Fiction 

Chapters: 5 chapters 

Specific: N/A 

Book

Cover - 

I like the cover, but the title doesn't match. It says, "Love and other disasters." A suggestion would be to change the title or to change the cover so that they both match, otherwise it adds to the confusion. 

Blurb -

I didn't see any faults with the blurb. 

Grammar - 

(Chapter One)

You mentioned that this is the unedited version, and you have an edited version, so I'm not sure what edits you have done regarding grammar, but I will vaguely go over a couple. (If you already know this, then please ignore it).

Your examples...

"My dad is 35 years old." 

"Since he had me when he was 18..." 

Usually, we write ages in word form and not in numerals. 

So a suggestion would be...

"My dad is thirty-five years old." 

"Since he had me when he was eighteen..." 

(Chapter Two)

The same thing applies to this chapter. 

Your example...

"...I spot 2 more doors right by mine..."

A suggestion could be...

"...I spot two more doors right by mine..." 

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When you use "dad," it should be a capital. When it's "my dad," it's always a lower case because of the 'my'. 

Your examples...

"In my dream closet, dad."

"This means dad will be in the room opposite..." 

A suggestion would be...

"In my dream closet, Dad." 

"This means Dad will be in the room opposite..."

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Just be aware of when you change tenses. You write in the present tense, and you do a great job, but I noticed this example...

"His chest vibrates as he chuckles at my excitement, his arms wrapped around my shoulders." 

A suggestion could be...

"His chest vibrates as he chuckles at my excitement, his arms wrap around my shoulders."

(Chapter Three)

Be careful of overusing certain words. You use chuckle a lot. 

Your examples...