Chloe's Book Reviews {CLOSED/ HIATUS}

The Perks Of Being A Human

Author: @Huitaca

Chapters: 3 chapters

Genre: Teen Fiction/ Humour

Specific: Grammar

Cover-

Your cover is cute and simplistic. I love the colour scheme and how it all fits together. I understand how the title fits with the cover because of the dog (puppy) on the cover.

I wouldn't change anything, but I had to admit, I was half-expecting a dog to appear somewhere in the story. All the other covers include Adie walking or holding a dog.

Blurb-

Your example...

"How she is going to cope with her life? Plan C..?"

My suggestion would be...

"Plan C: How is she going to cope with life?"

The rest of the blurb is okay, but I would consider removing "very" from this sentence below.

"She takes a long journey with her very close friends..."

A suggestion here could be...

"She goes on a mind-blowing journey with her best friends until she decides that a summer job would be a perfect rule-breaker and an escape from reality."

Grammar-

(Chapter One)

Your example...

"I am sorry Adie, I couldn't contain myself I—" Bailey started when I interrupted putting my hand in front of her face and looking to the right while closing my eyes."

Your example here is a little wordy and long. You need to make it more precise by getting rid of the unnecessary words.

Try to change, "I am sorry" to "I'm sorry."

We tend to use the contraction of the word, especially in dialogue, making it more realistic.

A suggestion could be...

"I'm sorry, Adie. I couldn't contain myself I –" Bailey started before I interrupted her, putting my hand in front of her face and turned my head away."

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Your example...

"Drama queen? Drama QUEEN?" I asked shoving with my finger a fake tear"

You have to remember to add full stops to mark the end of a sentence. To make the dialogue here realistic, I would consider using an exclamation mark instead of a question mark. Using it twice is repetition, but also because an exclamation mark paints a better picture rather than using a word in capitals.

My suggestion would be this...

"Drama queen? Drama queen!" I yelled, wiping a fake tear with my fingertip."

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Your example...

"I fake gasped and shook my head dramatically while throwing myself again in my seat."

A few suggestions could be...

"I gasped and reclined against the seat rest."