Chloe's Book Reviews {CLOSED/ HIATUS}

She Was Planned But He Was A Surprise

Author: @klarolinefan11

Chapters: 3 chapters

Genre: Teen/Humour

Specific: Plot & characters

Cover-

The cover fits well with the genre and clearly shows that love will blossom throughout the book. I'm not sure if the cover would grab me to read the book in a bookstore though. The title would make me intrigued as I want to know the reasoning for it.

I absolutely love your Aesthetics. They are really lovely.

Blurb-

I would suggest changing the layout of your blurb as you have one paragraph, and then the rest is like one-lined sentences with a space in between.

A blurb is usually one paragraph or two fairly short ones.

I also noticed that some words are in the past tense, and the blurb should be written in the present, no matter what tenses you use in the book.

Your example...

"...fancied by many but he has been afraid to be friends with anyone."

My suggestion would be...

"He's drop-dead gorgeous as all the girls fall madly in love with him, but Roman isn't the type to make friends."

or

"With his crazy-good looks and girls swooning over him, Roman becomes oblivious as he isn't the type to make friends easily."

Here is my rough draft of what you should be looking for in a blurb. This might not be following everything you want in your story, but it will hopefully grab attention and make it more exciting.

"Welcome to Williams high, where the star pupil, Roman Lockhart, spends his year isolating himself because he hates being different. With his crazy-good looks and girls swooning over him, Roman becomes oblivious as he isn't the type to make friends easily. In Junior year, the students witness a breathtaking change in Roman as he finally overcomes his flaws. A new chance to start over as he swears to take his secrets to his grave.

Amy Clark is sassy and determined to unearth the truth about his past, threatening Roman to spill all.

In the midst of secrets, lies, and betrayal, a series of events take place.

Are these two capable of putting their differences aside or will they end up clashing heads over something far more sinister?"

Grammar-

(Chapter One)

You write in the past tense, but you just have to change this word in the sentence for it to stay consistent.

Your example...

"She worked at a cafeteria after school and spend all her pay on decorating herself or buying new books..."

My suggestion would be...

"...and spent all her pay..."

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Another example...

"Whatever the amount the couples manages to earn,"

My suggestion would be...

"Whatever the amount the couples managed to earn,"