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THE WRONG GIRL (Blossom High School Series)

Author: @Eddy622

Chapters: 4 chapters

Genre: Teen-fiction

Specific: Everything 

Cover-

I like the cover. Everything on the cover fits well with your story.

All I would say would be to make the "Blossom High School Series" a little more readable. Good job!

Blurb-

I actually really love the concept of "The Wrong Girl" because it's true. We only see what happens to "The Right Girl."

It's nice that you explain it at the beginning of the blurb, but I feel like you could perhaps make it a little shorter. The blurb is supposed to be fairly short. The word count differs, but I read that a blurb should be between 100-130 words to hook readers. I'm aware everybody says a different thing.

A suggestion could be to make it shorter or to add it into the narration in the following chapters like an introduction.

The reason I'm saying this is because your second paragraph, "Eno had been..." is great. This whole paragraph was enticing and contained all the elements for a blurb.

Even if you switch the paragraphs around, this will hook the readers straight away because they will immediately understand that Eno is the main character and understand the conflict.

(Sometimes it's better to get straight to the point, especially with the blurb. You want to suck the reader in like a leech and entice them further, rather than read this long text before you get to the main course).

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There were a few misspellings, but I know English isn't your first language.

Your example...

"...about a boy who dumbed his long termed girlfriend..."

A suggestion would be...

"...about a boy who dumped his long-term girlfriend..."

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I also read that the blurb should be written in the present tense and not the past.

Your example...

"Eno had been the most popular girl at Blossom High School. She was like every cliché popular girls you've read on books and watched on television.

She had a nasty attitude, popular boyfriend and three popular besties. Every girl wanted to be her, and every guy wanted to be with her.

But her all so perfect life changed when her boyfriend Alex, kissed the one girl he claimed not to have feelings for. Now, Eno have to walk round school being who she thought she would never be..... THE WRONG GIRL."

My suggestion here is written in the present tense, so it's up to you if you use it or not. I'm just making you aware that the blurb should be written in the present tense, whether your book is in the present or past tenses. It's not perfect but hopefully will show you an idea of what it could look like.

"Eno is the most popular girl at Blossom High School. She is like every cliché popular girl you've seen on television and in books.

Every girl wants to be like her, and every guy wants to be seen with her.