The Queen's Critique Chamber

⚜️ Batch 1: You'll Be Mine Whatever It Takes

Royal Critique Work by Saengiie_Noona
Story: You'll Be Mine Whatever It Takes
Written by: marialennygrace

⚜️ TITLE:

"You'll Be Mine Whatever It Takes"
~Your title is good!, from your choosen words you already state your story outline and sort of content. Possession and Greediness in love are surely to be expected in your story. As a matter of fact your choice is good so no problem at all.

⚜️ BOOK COVER:

~ simple black and white photo with cute image of love triangle.. is kinda cute yet.. I'm looking for something a little bit catchy!

I'm not saying your cover is bad , but as you see most of these days most people judge the book by it's cover , more attractive , more curiosity, more curiosity , more readers to come ..
And to be honest your cover is cute, very suitable for your story  but your choosen color are not okay. Try to pic another photo that can be more eye candy that has more life and color.

Fonts and Color fonts is Okay but when you change your cover be reminded to be careful with your fonts and color .. Avoid dark and dark theme same with dark fonts  just be more light and cute or more appropriate for your story theme .

Try also our Royal graphic shop we have them here very soon and they can help you too with your cover (^_-)-☆

⚜️ DESCRIPTION / BLURB:

~ohh so True! I agree with your description and definitely a good taste of yours knowing its from writer/singer Bob Marley.

Aside from that you use a wise way to make people curious na magiging dahilan ng pagbabasa na nila ng story mo..

Same for me hahaha .. I'm curious which guy is perfect for kate ?" Aisel or Mike?.

But add more spice to this one I'm not sure of what it is ? but I'm all okay for your choice 🙂 ..so its your choice.

⚜️ PROLOGUE:

Well done! you made it simple ,straight and mysterious

Naipahayag mo ng maayos kung saan nag simula ang lahat few although i saw some typos but still its good!! Nice start to make readers crave for more ..

⚜️BOOK CONTENT (Chapter 1-5)

- its all Good you have a nice way of writing like cliff hanger etc. Very clear, and nice with all typos can be seen but its all good and as i read I'm craving for more like your readers probably do.

⚜️DIALOGUES:

- all fair and square ..sakto ang bigayan ng litanya ng bawat characters, maayos na ipaphayag yung feelings nila at yung emotion na meron sila . Kaso ..
May typos din dito unti lang naman yun at kayang kayang baguhin . After all you did great!! And I'm happy for that!

⚜️ CHARACTERS:

Perfect!! well described and clearly noted. Very good for this part! You state and clarify all the infos of your read roles no etc and straight forward.

⚜️TECHNICALITIES:

As I said your story is good! And almost perfect!! Some typos can be seen and here it is :

*Many - People instead.

Try to use people instead of many whether you change it or not it's your choice.

Instead of that try to use mine ;:
"Alam mo 'yong pakiramdam na sa tuwing nakakakita ka ng kahit anong bench ay parang gusto mo

(to be continued)
Parang gusto mong maupo at matulog na" -

-try to use thia one its more appropriate 🙂

Typographical errors:

*ibinta - i benta *
*Nakakahiya - kakahiya*
*Talaga- talag
Matuto - Matoto

And after all its all perfect!!!
Job well done!

⚜️ WRITING SKILLS:

- You have a very promising story , you have a very unique strategy in making story and outline.
Actually your all good and amazing to be exact ..and as i see you don't need me for this one because you already work it out so well..

I'm definitely out of words while reading your story and i really love it .. I'm satisfied with your writing skills and no worries all good and pretty pleasant ..

Message:

Thanks you for trusting me your story i know you're a better writer than me and i hope i didn't fail you with my words.. im totally out of words so yep your good and i love it seriously..

Just change the cover and apply things that i recommend and your all perfect !!..

Sorry for keep you waiting..
Ksaranghe(*˘︶˘*).｡.:*♡