The Queen's Critique Chamber

⚜️ Batch 1: Undercover Of The MASK

Royal Critique Work by shnmiaaa / Royal Critic AneMia
Story: Undercover Of The MASK
Written by: ZIRA-SAD-BS

⚜️TITLE:

Undercover Of The MASK

Anong ibig mong sabihin? Undercover Of The MASK? I got confused. Wrong structure of title choice. Ano nga ba ang undercover? Ang undercover is like involving a secret work— more like for investigation purposes 'di ba po? Undercover relating to a person doing a secret work or a secret activity. Undercover of the Mask. Ang ibig n'yo po bang sabihin is ang pagtuklas ng katotohanan sa misteryosong lalalaking nakasuot ng mask 'di po ba? You mean to find out. To reveal his identity of the said man with a mask. Kaya I think, this title is not good dahil wrong grammar. You seem to be confused of your chosen title, po. Please revise. Think this through. If you think I'm right, I could help you with this title I come up with:

Undercover: The Mask Revealed

or

Behind the (Add decriptive terms ex: Black/ Mysterious/ Odd, etc) Mask

or

Behind His Masked Face

(And don't write it this way: Undercover Of The MASK

Write it like this:
Undercover of the Mask

*If you still find this title right po, maybe you could atleast consider following how this title should be written? Pero kung ako ang masusunod. Dapat palitan mo ang title mo.)

You could think of other titles though. You are after all ang writer nito.

And what's with the hashtag? Kung ilalagay n'yo po 'yan d'yan please make sure na maayos ito. I believe ito ay #YourChoice2018 not #YoureChoise2018 I mean... is it? Please correct me here if mali ako dito. Please make it clear po. The title is the very first thing na makikita ng iyong readers po. Kaya please think this all through. :)

⚜️BOOKCOVER:

I don't see anything special sa cover mo po. For writers na gusto talaga ng mga kaakit-akit o mga eye-catching na covers, they would find another cover na mas maganda. And the guy in the cover is not even wearing some mysterious mask that could really cover his whole face. And it's a gas mask to top with that. Ito po ba ang tinutukoy mo na mask? I suggest you can request some help sa mga graphic shops dito sa watty. Marami naman po sila dito. They are just a click away. Soon po, may graphic shop na gagawin dito sa WeRoyals_PH and you could ask us some help with your cover po soon :)

⚜️DESCRIPTION / BLURB:

You have the idea pero parang hindi mo alam kung paano ito ipahiwatig ng maayos. I can tell, you have a hard time constructing a sentence mapa-english man o mapa-tagalog. Kaya hayaan mo akong tulungan ka dito sa description mo: