The Queen's Critique Chamber

⚜️Batch 5: Naked Scars

Royal Critique Work by shnmiaaa
Story: Naked Scars
Written by: Spiral_Equinox

⚜️TITLE:

Naked Scars. Hmm, first impression for me would mean this story will not be a kind of story na pawang kilig lamang, walang malalim na backstory, o 'yong mga istorya na nakikita natin ngayon na wala lang talagang sense. (Sorry but I didn't mention anyone's story kaya 'di pa ako mabash haha.)

Your title, it's unique and peculiar! Hindi mema lang. In fact, it stands for its own reason why it has the title. A reason one would be able to know as they follow the story of course.

It's great!!! I feel like mas maganda 'yong mga 1-2 word title lang or 3. Kaya nagustuhan ko 'to. Lol.

⚜️BOOKCOVER:

Is it just me? Or the cover looks like it's a story about horror?

Is this a general fiction, right? I know what you mean here, scars... yes. Abused? Yes. But it just gives off a horror vibe. Dominant ito sa cover po. Also, the portraying girl looks old for the heroin in the story. Let's be good in rendering the main protagonist in your book cover. It will also be a means of displaying kasi your protagonist which will give a hint of how your character would be like in just a glimpse sa mga readers. At ito? Mukha kasi s'yang matanda. Para sa akin, mas mabuti na nakakaakit ang book cover ng isang istorya at tama talaga ang description nito. Also for the description, it does not correlate sa cover mo po. "Touch until you can't resist."

Let's give justice sa title (ang ganda kaya) and match it up in your visual and description.

Yours could use a different cover don't you think? I suggest something simple, formal with dark and rich colors involve.

Something like this:

You see colors of a book cover also conveys the story's aura. Ang plain and dull lang ng sa iyo. Rich colors could portray your character na si Adelaine— a beautiful woman, who might be shy is not a doubt a beauty. And dark(black) colors to give off the mystery behind her (story). The flower also could be a symbol of her purity and innocence and how she hold it to her dearly could mean something. Don't you think? Mga ganyan lang na cue sa cover with a little analysis with it, but could mean a tremendous effect sa whole attraction of the story.