Colliding Hearts by PremaFR
Reviewer : GiselleJaneZee
CHAPTERS READ: 4
Cover and Title: 2.5/5
The cover of the book is quite too simple to captivate a reader. The fonts are too small to be read on the cover. It looks more like a collage than a book cover. Working on it can intrigue a wide audience.
Title was extremely accurate in accordance to the story. It was interesting to note how the story starts with a fresh romance but soon the problem knocks at the door of the lovers. The events in first few chapters quite brilliantly explained the relevance of the title with the book.
Blurb: 3/5
Blurb was too short but was easily able to capture ones attention. Drawing the curiosity inside the reader to explore the book. The starting of the blurb was a little unsettling. Working on blurb and increasing its length while adding few creative lines could actually help intensify the interest of a reader.
Plot and Structure: 6.5/10
The plot and storyline was amazing! However, the structure requires few refinements. The paragraphs needs to be segregated properly. The change in perspective is quite too frequent but its is never left on a dead end, instead of too frequent change in povs try to narrate in third person pov. The communication between both the characters is quite nicely written. But, the story seems quite fast paced considering how they started a relationship in only 2 days within 3 chapters. Proper pacing can make you offer more content while keeping the readers to look forward.
Character development: 3.5/5
The development of the characters is quite fast paced as I mentioned above. Since you have uploaded only 4 chapters its quite hard to figure out what changes will characters under. Henceforth, you should keep in mind to have a proper pacing while developing your story further.
Grammar and Vocabulary: 3/5
Grammar was good with few occasional mistakes. Refinements are required to make it perfect. The story lacks an impactful vocabulary. The text seems quite too plain. Use of different words can enhance the story more.
Overall enjoyment: 7.5/10
It is a well written story with wonderful storyline. Working on few aspects of the same will ameliorate the reading experience for the readers.
Total: 26/40
