Fright School by kacquah
Reviewer : the_lonely_pi
Cover - 3/5
A more dynamic or mysterious cover could elevate its appeal, drawing readers in at first glance.
Title - 4/5
The title *Fright School* is catchy and straightforward, hinting at a supernatural, eerie theme. However, it could benefit from a more distinct twist to set it apart from similar titles in the same genre.
Blurb - 4/5
The blurb effectively sets up the world, mentioning the presence of mythical creatures and hinting at a larger conflict. However, it could use a bit more suspense or a hook to make it truly gripping. The stakes feel high, but the blurb could be refined to add more mystery and excitement.
Characters - 7/10
The characters seem to be set up well, with intriguing roles as they navigate a world of danger and hidden abilities. The man in the hotel scene is mysterious and resourceful, which helps build tension. However, the depth of the other characters isn't clear from this excerpt. Their unique motivations and personalities will play a big role in engaging readers.
Plot - 8/10
The premise is engaging, with a mix of supernatural elements, danger, and secrets. The combination of different mythical races and a mysterious, ancient evil creates an interesting backdrop. The balance of tension in the present-day California setting also adds a unique twist to what could otherwise be a typical supernatural story.
Grammar & Vocabulary - 3.5/5
While the writing is generally solid, there are a few places where sentence structure could be improved for smoother readability. Certain sections feel a bit long-winded, and could benefit from sharper, more concise language. The vocabulary is good, but it could be more varied to elevate the overall tone.
Enjoyment - 4/5
The excerpt is thrilling, and the story moves at a fast pace, making it exciting. The danger is palpable, and the supernatural elements are engaging. However, there are points where clarity or further characterization would help in enhancing the immersive experience.
Overall Rating: 29.5/40
The book has great potential, especially with its premise and action-packed scenes. A few refinements in character depth, grammar, and blurb intrigue would make it even stronger.
