Unexpected Encounter by shytabby
Reviewer : Gise_lliana
CHAPTERS READ: 7+
Cover and Title: 3.5/5The cover of the book is good but it feels a bit bland and not aligned with the story. It just doesn't sit right to me but that's just my opinion. A more graphically attractive cover can enhance the outer appearance which is essential for the story.
The choice of the title was great. The encounter between Mr. Ben Adams and Ms. Shelley Dickson and the progression in their relationship was definitely unexpected one. The title is on point and fits perfectly with the story.
Blurb: 2/5As it appears to me, the blurb in this case has been divided into three sections. But the thing is there is no proper connection between those paragraphs. In short lacks fluidity throughout. On another note the construction of the first paragraph is just awesome and it is sufficient as a blurb. Other two paragraphs are not really necessary and are giving out too much information. Moreover there are quite some grammatical errors as well!
Plot and Structure: 8/10The plotline is remarkably engaging and at the same time very carefully constructed. There are a lot of scenes which intrigues the reader making them look forward to the next chapter. Structure is fine but if you could work on segregating the clauses that are spoken by the characters can help readers understand well rather than making them confused.
Pacing wasn't much of a problem but then as we approached the end, you have kind of exaggerated a bit on Shelley's part. Since, even after everything Ben did, it took her alot of time to realize that Ben was the one for her. I have skimmed through most of the chapters and have completely read the last few chapters so this opinion is based on that.
Character development: 4/5The character development of Ben is very wonderfully written. It's neither lagging nor fast, exactly the way it should be. Except for the last parts Shelley's development was remarkable as well. The progression in their relationship is kind of fast but in this case works so it's not really a problem.
Grammar and Vocabulary: 2.5/5There are alot of grammatical errors that you need to work on. Spelling errors can be avoided through proofreading. Other than that there are punctuation errors as well. At many places when a conversation is taking place you have forgotten to add the double inverted commas which in turn confuses a reader to a great extent and creates a very negative impact towards the story. I have also come across the book that is the edited version of the same, therefore I'd suggest instead of publishing an edited version you can edit the content in this book itself. This is just a suggestion.
Overall enjoyment: 7.5/10Overall, it was a good storyline which provided me with a fresh read and also made me feel a great amount of emotional rollercoasters.
Total: 27.5/40
