Last Light by @MmTt11
Tenses were jumping around - stick to the past. Also had some problems with plurals so keep an eye on that.
You sometimes had unnecessary additional articles.
Commas before names.
I really liked the connection between Apollo and Aunt Jonah.
Great suspense too.
Novel books can just be shortened to novels.
I'll tag you in a critique where I've shown someone else how to format dialogue correctly.
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