Gems From a Sapphire by @Naalboye
Not sure about the numbering of stanzas like in the first one. I think it ruins the pace and rhythm of the poem. You could just change the formatting so there's less space between lines and then the stanzas are more differentiated.
Loved the second poem and how the language all linked.
I wouldn't use colloquial language since it makes the writing amateur.
Great set of poems though - love the ending of the last one! That had me!
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