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#223 One Heart And A Sea Of Emotions

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One Heart and a Sea of Emotions by @Miyura_Mado form submitted by @Akiramado

Its/it's

I like the setting of the sea. It's unusual to get one like that on wattpad. I also liked how all the characters were tied together by the sea. Very neat.

Commas before names (especially in the parts where Ryota was addressing the captain).

Ellipses only need 3 dots.

More description of the killer would really enhance the writing and make it a lot more menacing.

Numbers spelled out in full look more formal.

...," isn't right. It's ..." only.

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