#220 The Unbelievable Tale Of The Adventure That Raised Me

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The Unbelievable Tale of the Adventure that Raised Me by @CitrusBooks

Some small typos but I pointed these out in the comments.

Good description - very vivid.

I would divide long paragraphs into shorter ones. They're a bit hard to read otherwise.

This book reminds me of one called the Faerie Forest.

Other than that, all good and I have nothing more to say. :)

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