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#215 Divided We Fall

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Divided We Fall by @RachelWinchester1967

Comma splices can be fixed with a semi colon or a full stop.

Thoughts should be in italics (I only saw one instance though.)

Nice pacing. The description I found was a little bland and there wasn't a lot of it. For example with the cave and the wolf.

Preposition choices could have been improved, but I commented the corrections.

I do like Raquelle - and the twist with the name. Original.

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