Divided We Fall by @RachelWinchester1967
Comma splices can be fixed with a semi colon or a full stop.
Thoughts should be in italics (I only saw one instance though.)
Nice pacing. The description I found was a little bland and there wasn't a lot of it. For example with the cave and the wolf.
Preposition choices could have been improved, but I commented the corrections.
I do like Raquelle - and the twist with the name. Original.
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