OC Reviews [now closed bc of personal issues]

Bertholt Faye | Original Story | [ A ]

Storyline: a world where certain people have the ability to see and fight demons, and it's their responsibility to do so. Some people use their powers to lead and fight in gangs against other gangs to get the money that comes with defeating a demon.

I've seen things similar to this, though if written nicely and characters are memorable then it should be interesting.

Name: Bertholdt Faye

Unique name, good.

Gender: transmale

Most people don't do this, and it's good representation!

Age: 25

S/O: gay

Personality:

* passive aggressive

* life of the party

* risk taker (maybe too extreme of a risk taker)

* can get defensive

The traits fit together nicely, seems interestingly salty!

Likes:

* classical music (used to play the cello)

* granola

* large, fluffy, yet still mellow dogs

* honey

Cute.

Dislikes:

* peanuts (has a mild allergy)

* boardgames

* bright/flashing lights

Description:

* fluffy, curly, white dyed hair that's also described as unneat

* light skin that's spotted with pale freckles

* cloudy blue eyes

* fairly tall (6'1)

* often wears more casual clothing with red converse and the same olive green, parka jacket

Nicely described! Converse are really overused though.

Strengths:

• speedy quick

• charming personality/social skills

Weakness:

• isn't physically strong

• struggles to commit to relationships

What a romantic wreck he is.

Powers/Abilities: (if necessary)

like others of with his cursed/blessed blood, he can see demons. Therefore it is his, and their, responsibility to rid the world of them while still trying to continue a normal life.

Crush/Love Interest: (optional)

• his kind of ex named Leonardo

• some newbie named Maxwell

Overall, this character seems interesting and makes me want to learn more about his past. Character is unique, not because of powers, but because of personality and appearance. I didn't really need to say much about him because he's pretty decent.

Sue Rating: 10%

Originality Rating: 90%

Interest Grade: A