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Mya | Undertale | [ B ]

Oc made by: WhenSerphantAppears

Fandom: Undertale

Name: Mya

Okay, but maybe think of a name thats a bit more unique, just to fit with the other characters.

Age: Around 22

Gender: Female

Soul Color: Grey

Species: Mouse, but she has a humanoid version of herself.

I haven't seen any mouse undertale cos before! Though are her two forms kind of like Mettaton?

Height: 5'7

Appearance Looks: (Human) Mya is a female humanoid rodent with long white hair with black-red eyes. She wears a crown on her head with a white strip tied around to make it a small bow, she has pale skin and mouse ears, and wears a black and white dress-like shirt, she has a long, skinny tail with a bow on the end, colored white, she wears leggings with high heels, but doesn't wear them all the time, though sometimes wears flats instead.

Fits with her character, however 'human' is probably not the best word to use.

As her rat form, she is a small, white rodent with red eyes and a pale- like tail, same as her skin color as a human actually.

From what I've seen of undertale monsters, they aren't usually just an animal. There's usually something added to it or have some sort of theme (which makes them monsters). Also how does her smaller form (wasn't she a mouse, not a rat?) become her "human" like form?

Personality: Mya is a kind but mischievous young girl. But, Mya can be nosy in things she shouldn't be in, and even steals things away, because of how "precious" and "specieal" it is, and the fact is, she thinks everything is precious.

Mya has a love for children (no, not in the paedophile why.) She even called Frisk "Sweetie" even though they dont really like it. Mya also likes human children, and dislikes adult humans, because of the "rumours" her friend, Regina (another oc) told her, even though they both don't know anything about adult humans.

The traits fit together nicely, and is rather interesting as well.

Residence: Hotland - She doesn't really know a lot of people out of Hotland due to her not being out of her house a lot.

Relationships:

Vulkin - They haven't really talked to each other, but Mya thinks Vulkin is extreamly cute and adorable, but she is to scared to touch him.

Aww.

Madjick - they are not in good terms, even telling Madjick he is annoying, but Madjick sometimes just flat out ignores her, calling her 'idiot'

Mettaton - Mya has a huge crush on Mettaton and even blushes whenever he shows up on her tv, and she gets jealous whenever someone, especially a girl, goes around Mettaton, (not including Alphas)

I would usually say that this is a bad thing, but since Mettaton is a huge celebrity in the underground, it's understandable.

Frisk - She thinks Frisk is extreamly cute and whenever they passed by, she said "Hi Sweetie!" And smiled, waving at him, Frisk seemed to ignore her.

It's good that her relationships aren't all positive, and I like how some of them aren't big characters. Though what's her relationship with her friend Regina?

Love Intrest - Methadon

So do they end up interacting?

HP - 77

ATK - 9

DEF - 3

Boss Monster?: No

Miniboss Monster?: Yeah, if that's ok.

Totally okay!

Explanation: "This tall rodent seems to have a fond in children" (If you check her)

So is she always in her humanoid form?

Choices - Kick, Feed, Bite, Smell.

Quotes-

"Hi! Human~!" - Check

"Hey! Stop it!" - Kick

"Oh! You have cheese! Omg gimmie gimmie!!" - Feed

Mice are actually allergic to cheese.

"Uuuugggggghhhhhh!!!! No!" - Bite

"Huh? What?" - Smell

"Hey! I no fight anymore! I like human! Human is nice!" - Sparing

Flavor Text

Mya appears from the left! (Encounter)

Mya holds her knee in pain (If you kick)

Mya eats the cheese, in joy. (If you feed)

rip

Mya gives you a weak glare (if you bite)

Mya fans herself, in confidence (if you smell)

Attacks

- small crystals fall from the sky, the more you bite or kick her, the more harder it gets to dodge.

- a small humanoid is juggling 3, small white and round balls around your soul, this doesn't do any damage unless you get close to the balls.

- lines appear vertically on the box, then more lines appear, they are either orange or blue.

What exactly is the theme of her attacks?

Theme Song

DJ Contacreast - Gates of Freedom

Okay.

Trivia

• Mya is naturally blonde, but she dyed her hair white due to her friend, Regina, placing some paint on her hair, and Mya didn't like it so she decided to dye her hair white.

As asked before, has she always been in her more "human" form? And is there even dye in the underground, or did she use something else for it?

• Mya might have a small crush on Chara, regardless if they're a child, but Chara takes no intrest in Mya whatsoever.

Oh dear.. at least it doesn't go too far. Technically this could be considered as pedophilia. So, you know, try to avoid this por favor. Though how does she know Chara?

• if you attempt to name the fallen child 'Mya.' It will say "Nien!!" And prevents the name from being choosen.

• Mya's favorite word is "Pop". She says anything that is related to the word. Her second favorite word is "Derp"

Okie dokie.

There was a lot of confusion with her humanoid and mouse form, as well as the theme of her character. But I liked how she had relationships with monsters who aren't so big in the main plot, but she does have a crush on the two characters she does know. Overall, I like this character, but it seems like there needs to be a bit of more explaining.

Sue Rating: 20%

Originality Rating: 80%

Interest Grade: B