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Emarita | MLP | [ F ]

Fandom: MLP

Name: Emarita

Species: changeling

Gender: female

Age: 23 at time of siege on canterlot

Appearance: black and fanged like a normal changeling. But every changeling has small differences that help to tell each other apart, her difference is that her hair has a purple tinge, she has fewer holes in her body, and her mane is slightly longer.

I've never noticed the small differences, between changelings, and the purple tinted hair is a little bit far fetched. Also changelings don't have hair. Look them up.

Family: the whole swarm is her family, the Queen is the mother and caretaker of all changelings including Emarita.

Personality: Loves making the queen proud and will do anything to keep her safe. She is very brave and most of the swarm considers her one of their more beautiful sisters because of her purple-Iish mane. Enjoys terrorizing the ponies and loves it when Queen Chrysalis takes the swarm to small villages for more substantial feeding than one lone source of love. Her favorite emotion to feed on from ponies is fear, though not even that can beat her queen/mother's love.

With so many changelings, it's not that great that she's close to the queen. Be considered more beautiful by the changelings is also rather Mary Sueish.

Backstory: Lived with her swarm all of her life, but as a filly, she went exploring and found herself lost within a pony city, she knew well enough to change herself into a mare she'd seen from the shadows as not to attract attention. However, that same pony found her again and she revealed herself as a changeling, begging for mercy. The ponies attacked her until Queen Chrysalis, who'd been looking for her lost changeling, came to her rescue. As she grew, she terrorized small villages with her family, until finally, the canterlot siege. She enjoyed every second of it, posing as one of Cadence's guards to protect her queen, and after they'd revealed themselves, she'd snap at ponies heads from the air to increase their fear, her favorite emotion for feeding. Once they were on the run, she helped her queen escape, but at the cost of her own life.

I may not be the most fluent in MLP, but according to my understanding, the changelings weren't a big deal until that one point in time.

Cause of death: Posed as Queen Chrysalis to allow the real one to escape, and was executed in her place.

Oh she died. Okay. She died for this lady who realistically shouldn't have been able to notice her. Not okay.

Overall, her being such an amazing Changeline is really not good. Her being noticed by and sacrificing herself for a canon character that, with all of those changelings, should have never been able to recognize her is also really not good. Her having hair as a species that has no hair, and then having her hair be more beautiful is really not good.

Sue rating: 90%

Originality rating: 15%

Interest grade: [ F ]