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Review by Ayesha: Meant For You

Title: Meant For You

Author: SallyMary89

Reviewer: Blue_Kiwi_777

Overall Plot: 2/5

Okay, so the book is good thus far. While reviewing it, though, I've picked up some issues. Firstly, while reading Chapter One Part One, I had not one clue as to where all the characters were. Where was Ella? In a room? School? Where was the ladder leading to? All I know is that the ladder reached up to a balcony, which still leaves me clueless. Whose balcony was it? It was slightly confusing and so I implore you to please go back and elaborate on that section so the reader will know what is going on. There isn't a lot of substance yet in the story. In Part One, where did Ethan take Ella? You stated a garden, yes, but where is this garden? You need to make me feel as if I'm there! Overall, it's not bad. It has a lot of potential.

Grammar: 3/5

I don't have a lot of problems here, but for example: 

"Are you okay? " He asked. 

This is wrong. "He" should be in small letters, not capitals, because it is not the start of a sentence and it's not a name. Instead, it should be: 

"Are you okay?" he asked.

I find that you made that mistake several times. 

You also use the comma a lot in places that it shouldn't be used. There are also a lot of spelling errors. For example: 'stares' should just be 'stare'. This is just one example of the many errors.

Character Building: 2/5

You have good characters. 

But! There's a huge BUT. 

As I stated before, there isn't much substance in your first chapter - which is basically the grand opening for your characters! 

I wanted a backstory on Ethan. I wanted a backstory on Ella. I wanted a little history and unfortunately, I never got enough. I wanted to see more of their friendship. I would've liked to have seen more of Ethan, but as he was already dead, you could have provided a flashback perhaps. Ella is a good character, however, just don't make her too difficult. The main character must be flawed but must also be likeable, so that the reader can bond with her.

Writing Style/Description: 2/5

I didn't find much of a problem here. 

However, I wanted more description! You never described where they were in the beginning. I don't know which garden he took her to! I suggest that you should also pace your novel at a good speed, because you don't want people to lose interest. At times, I didn't find it slow. I know you can do better though, because you can write well.

Plot Uniqueness: 5/5

It's original, but it's sort of been done before. I suggest that you work thoroughly on your novel to create twists so that your story stands out.

Overall Score: 14/25

Hi there! Thank you so much for choosing me as your reviewer! I'm sorry for the delay on your review. I have just finished reading all five chapters, as you've requested! I hope that the criticism isn't taken to heart! I loved reading your book - all I can say is that you can do great things if you put your mind to it! Just chill, focus, and write away, fellow writer!