Title: Flares in the Dark
Author: ThaisaKing
Reviewer: fantasy_panda2003
Summary: 5/5
You have excellent word choice throughout your summary. It also left suspense and was intriguing and enjoyable to read. Great work!
Grammar: 4.5/5
You have an incorrect spelling of "beginning" in your introduction chapter. Also, you have some problems with your past and present tenses. One sentence in your introduction chapter that I found reads:
"...you're nothing but a thorn in a person's life when everything seemed to be crumbling around you."
This is an improper use of the word "seemed." Since the rest of your sentence is written in present tense , the word "seemed" should be changed to the present tense word "seems" so that it fits in grammatically with your sentence.
I would suggest looking through your story and fixing any mistakes like the ones above. Other than that, your spelling, grammar, and punctuation are all flawless and well written.
Character Building: 5/5
Just from reading your introductory chapter, I can already tell that your main character has a strong personality. The way you convey his feelings is compelling and your amazing word choice makes it that much better. I enjoyed seeing your character grow in his relationships with the other characters and himself throughout the duration of the story.
Writing Style: 4.5/5
I would have liked to see more dialogue in your story. Dialogue really helps bring out your characters' personalities and reveals their traits in a way that monologue alone can't convey However, monlogue is not a bad thing as it ties in well with a lot of your story elements.
Plot + Uniqueness: 5/5
This story is nothing like I've ever read before. The plot is so unique and well thought out and I absolutely love the storyline.
OVERALL SCORE: 24/25
Why does this story not have more reads?! I mean, it's AMAZING! Also, congratulations on winning Book of the Month for May from me and for being shortlisted in the Monthly Gemstone Awards.
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