Danganronpa OC Reviews (CLOSED)

HotCat37 : Souji Takahashi

Name: Souji Takahashi

Age: 15

Gender: Male

Sexuality: Bisexual but leans more towards females.

Nationality: Japanese

Talent: Ultimate Prince

Personality: He's outgoing and the kind of person to smile a lot. He's quite a ladies man, too. Besides being a ladies-man and bragging a lot about many different things, he can get quite shy whenever anyone flirts with him. He's also very protective of his friends.
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Appearance: He has slightly fluffy blonde hair and blue eyes. He wears a slightly oversized white T-shirt and long dark blue shorts. (He really doesn't like wearing 'fancy' clothing and states his current clothes are way more comfortable). He also wears white socks and gold-coloured sneakers.
I like his design, but it seems like he wouldn't have a really prominent silhouette. DR characters all have very distinct silhouettes, so you might want to add an accessory/give him a more prominent hairstyle or ahoge to make his silhouette more distinct and make readers know who he is easier! Other than that, I really like his design!

Backstory: Souji grew up in Japan's royal family. He lived with his Father, Mother and a younger brother. His talent was actually decided by a game Souji and his brother played. Only one of them could be their generation's Ultimate Prince and they both didn't want to argue with the other. His little brother came up with a game that involved a dice and would decide who was going to be the Ultimate Prince. The pair of dice landed on his colour and his little brother would figure out his own talent later. He met Kentaro (And another OC) in Kindergarten after he scared away some bullies. The both of them became best friends and often hung out together. Things were going very well until he turned 7. His Father for some reason began drinking a lot of alcohol and would often beat Souji. His Father was sadly very good at covering it up so his Mother and little brother never found out. Souji became physically stronger than most kids his age due to him sometimes fighting back against his Father. He enrolled into Trust's Peak later due to Trust's Peak also accepting royal people into the school. While he does have a very strong dislike against his Father, he wouldn't wish death upon him, as he has those very rare moments of being a genuinely good Father. He kind of grew up being a gentleman since his Mother was always a very kind and generous person. He was also told by his Father to never hit women.
I like his backstory. However, I don't think the physical abuse is necessary. You seem to be falling into the issue of giving your characters terrible backstories so the readers feel sympathy for them.  Souji is a perfectly nice character as it is and he doesn't need that addition. Reading it over, it seems more like him getting beaten is a plot point so he can become stronger rather than an actual bad thing that happened to him, and you don't need to put it in. You don't have to force a reader to sympathise with a character by giving the character past trauma, especially with a character like Souji who is a nice character as is and very likeable.
I know you didn't mean to, I used to do the same thing when I started creating characters. It's an easy mistake to make, but it's just as easy to fix.
Considering his personality, flaws, strengths, reactions to things etc don't indicate his past trauma, he would be much better being strong because of his family teaching him how to fight (martial arts maybe?) (perhaps what his brother became an ultimate for) or something else. Other than that, his backstory is really good!

Reaction to seeing death: He'll be majorly pissed when it's a guy, and he might even cry when it's either a girl or someone very close to him.
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How would they kill: He'd kill someone to protect a certain someone, or he'd do it on accident.
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Flaws: He can be a bit aggressive at times and maybe brags too much sometimes.

Strengths: He's in good shape and easily cheers people up.

I really like Souji's character. He's genuinely likeable and seems very friendly and interesting!

Personality: 8.5/10
Character Design: 7.5/10
Originality: 9/10
Backstory: 5.5/10
Overall: 6.5/10

Going over the backstory would be a good idea, as I really don't think he needs to have a traumatic experience.  I hope I wasn't too harsh.
Thanks for sending in your OC!