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» Cover :: 6/10 The cover wasn’t that aesthetically pleasing for me, and the title didn’t really catch my eye either. The color choice for the title could have been better (it’s blending into the background now), and the faceclaim chosen also could have been better. Although everything that’s needed for the cover is there, you need to work more on the aesthetics of it in order to draw readers to your book.
» Title :: 4/5 I do see some sort of relevance (after giving it the benefit of the doubt), and it’s unique as well.
» Blurb :: 4/5 I unknowingly held my breath while reading the blurb, simply because wow. I had a clear depiction of what the story was going to be like from just 2 short but sweet paragraphs from your description, and it definitely left me in anticipation of what’s next. Good job! However, I wasn’t exactly clear as to who exactly the characters were and what they were going to go through. In a sense, it was vague, but not too vague to the point where I had no clue what was going on. To improve on it, try not to make your sentences too long. There were little to no breaks in the first paragraph, and it felt like I was reading everything out loud at one go.
Beginning of a new start :: 5/10
It was quite confusing and it didn’t really leave much of an impression on me. I enjoyed the writing style, but the plot so far was quite confusing for me to follow properly, and there was nothing much that stood out to me or appealed to me to continue reading, except for the fact that this book had exceptionally good grammar and an elegant writing style.
Concept & plot :: 20/25
I can see the effort you put in in researching, and it can be evidently shown in how you described the symptoms of the illness vividly. Good job!
The first few chapters leading up to the two of them meeting were quite confusing, to be honest. However, I actually quite like the story, and I was honestly drawn to it, and I’m not sure if it’s simply because of the writing style, but I’m sure the plot had a part to play as well. Overall, it’s a very promising story. Good job!
Characters & emotions :: 12/15
I loved that I was able to put myself in the shoes of the characters, and the vivid descriptions you had in the story helped me to immerse myself better as well. I enjoyed the way you portrayed your characters, and I really enjoyed reading it.
I especially enjoyed the flashback where the both of their emotions were described so vividly and clearly my heart felt things. I was able to gain a deeper understanding of Namjoon, and to a lesser extent Ria as well, and I felt that that scene was definitely one that touched my heart. Good job!
Overall, I can see the effort in character building. There are multiple characters in this book, so building all of them to be unique must have been very difficult. I won’t comment much on the build of the ‘side characters’, but I loved the way you developed your main leads.
Tone & style :: 8/10
Don’t get me wrong, I absolutely loved your writing style. I was able to immerse myself in the story and visualise scenes well with the way you wrote, and the paragraphing and flow was highly appropriate as well. However, you have to add breaks in your sentences more. Currently, if I were to read your work aloud, I wouldn’t be able to because I’d run out of breath before I finish the sentence or part of the sentence. You have to put in appropriate and relevant breaks that allow readers to pause for a moment, or it’ll just be you piling everything onto the reader, and it’ll snowball into a not-so-good reading experience for the readers.
Other than that, which doesn’t occur that much as well, I feel that your writing style is truly one to behold. I enjoyed the descriptions you wrote, and I could clearly visualise everything as well. Reading your work was definitely a treat for me! The writing style was really elegant and clear, and it definitely enhanced the reading experience for me, and helped me a lot in visualising and immersing myself in the scenes, and this was especially so for the characters. Without those descriptions, I would never have been able to feel emotions from the character, and I’d really like to commend you for that. Good job!
Grammar :: 17/20
I have to say, your grammar is one of the best among K-Pop fanfiction writers on Wattpad. There were little to no mistakes, and reading your work was more of an enjoyable getaway for me as a reviewer, and I didn’t feel forced to continue reading despite the bad grammar or anything. It was perfect.
Nonetheless, here is a mistake I managed to find and how to correct them:
Chapter 00’s [Her vision met with six men…] doesn’t sound very right here, according to my word sense. I did some research, and sure enough, [vision met] isn’t an appropriate phrase. Instead, I believe it should be [Her eyes met with six other men’s…]. If you believe otherwise, feel free to let me know so we could talk about this more!
An extra note :: Overall, your grammar was amazing. This is the first time I’ve seen almost no errors at all, and I was really blown away when I read the book. Well done!
Total :: 76/100
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