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» Cover :: 1/10 Definitely not the most attractive out there. It's simply a picture with some words thrown across it. There's no touch of designs, not even a quote or any basic editing. The only thing I could bear with is Jimin's face. The cover isn't what I could call suitable for the story either. The best option is to visit any graphics shop here on Wattpad and order a cover yourself.
» Title :: 3/5 It doesn't roll off one's tongue very smoothly. Fits Ash's role no doubt, not something I would come across very often either. But the aesthetic element of it; the charm isn't there.
» Blurb :: 2/5 To be completely frank with you, the blurb had me cringing. Certain authors would downright mention that their book contains smut and 18+ doings. You on the other hand had it subtle, but at one look, it seems like you're providing misinformation regarding workers in the company. "No touching, kissing, or sex." Does this seem realistic? Not every worker dreams of getting "it" from the members and is purely there for work. Those rules that you provided in the description in turn just made the members seem like some thirsty vampire out hunting for sex. Realistically, they're very busy people, I never said that them dating couldn't possibly happen but to the point of having to set those rules? It isn't giving them a very good image.
Beginning of a new start :: 5/10
It's like the start of any other story, and that's plain boring. The conversation between Ren and his boss isn't very intriguing. It's nice that you dived into the story immediately at the very beginning, and I'm loving the tiny comedic conversation between Ash and the cockroach. It's a great way to introduce her. However, even the beginning of a story deserves a little spicing up. Honestly, the "stranger" she met while digging for the ring would have owned the story completely if it were someone else other than Jimin. (if we push aside how coincidental that part would be, that is).
Concept and plot :: 12/25
Honestly, really plain, especially from how predictable you had it turn out. There were so many unrealistic issues and predicaments that bore me. Because at some point, all the events were specially written for the sake of uniting the two together. And let's be honest, love doesn't have it that way. Imagine bumping into a stranger, later on, work in the same company, and then having to share a room. Boom, that stranger is your "soulmate". The idea of forcing them together at the very beginning is overused and fast paced.
There's a slight issue with Ash and Jimin sharing a room. Not because they wouldn't, they couldn't. First, there's this issue called "scandals" that could completely ruin the group's reputation. Even if no cameras were around, it's very unrealistic of the boys to share a room with a female. Jimin would have cramped in with another member out of respect for Ash. Taking things into a realistic way of thinking, it shouldn't be possible. And as you mentioned, the rooms were full, which brings us to the thought that there were other guests living in the same hotel as the seven boys. It wouldn't be an issue for a stranger to snap a photo of them going into a room together. Be it random guests who somehow found out where the boys would be living or hotel staff, there's always a possibility of it happening.
