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Author :: _JKZSFF

Reviewer :: BerryStrawberryy

First Impression :: 6.5/20

Initially, I was under the impression that I was in for a mystery thriller, or something dark at the very least; I
was strongly mistaken. Though you have attempted to include certain heavy themes in your story, your
cover, title and blurb are very misleading. I would've given you the benefit of the doubt because your story is still ongoing, but nearly 40 chapters in… I still don't see any signs of the book as promised by the title and blurb.

» Cover :: 5/10

Look and Style: The very first thing I noticed about your cover was the simplicity; not too heavily edited and modest fonts. It was very subtle and pleasing to the eyes. And I liked the font placement—the translucent 'Park Jimin' on the side, the title, everything. But the subtitle/quote and the author's name weren't readable. I suggest enlarging the font size.
Theme and relevance: I don't see how the cover holds any relevance to the story. It's very generic and can probably be used for a number of other books. It isn't necessary to use Jimin as a face claim either. You could probably include a girl (y/n) or maybe even Taehyung, since he plays a major role in the story — anything to make it more relevant.

» Title :: 0.5/5

I'm sorry, but the title in no way deserves any points. There's absolutely no effort put into it. The book isn't as dark and mysterious, or focuses solely on one character like the title suggests. Having a common title isn't a bad thing, but it should at least sound interesting… or reflect your story in some manner.

Coming up with the perfect title can be very tricky; I'd suggest you think back to a particular moment/scene/theme (something that is present in your story only) and name the book after that.

» Blurb :: ⅕

A blurb for a book is basically what a trailer is for a movie. It is not only supposed to stir interest in the readers towards the plot but also showcase the best of the author's writing. That being said, although the synopsis did intrigue me slightly… I was still not convinced enough to continue further with your story. The description was too short. The ideal length for a blurb is 130-160 words. Not only should you include a little bit about the plot, but also introduce the characters slightly. Wouldn't it be weird to have a picture of Jimin on the cover, but no mention of him in the blurb? As we've already established, both Taehyung and Jimin are prominent characters in the story—it does not focus on Y/N alone—so it is only normal for them to be involved in the description.

Beginning of a new start :: 3/10

I'm not going to write much here because there isn't much to say. I'm sorry but the book really didn't make a good first impression on me. Be it plot-wise, writing-wise, grammar-wise or anything else, the first few chapters (still better than the story that followed) did absolutely nothing to make me want to continue
reading. But I'm not going to comment on the grammar and writing right now, since I'll be talking about those in detail in their respective sections that follow. The first chapter (or the first 3 chapters) are supposed to be like an introduction to the story. They're supposed to start off vague, just set up a general background for the rest of the story to unfold. Whereas your beginning was kind of an info-dump.
The note/disclaimer thing at the start was good and to the point, good job on that. But when the actual story began… it was a lot to take in. In the first 5-8 paragraphs, Y/N basically narrated her entire life in one breath. You shouldn't do that. You don't have to write everything at once, there's a lot of time and a lot of chapters for the story to unfold; if you reveal everything in the beginning, it will destroy the joy of discovering the characters' personalities for the audience.