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Did it for Gucci

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Did it for Gucci

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Author :: -Yoonshooky

Reviewer :: kimvante_

First impression :: 12/20

First off, it is a mandatory rule; while submitting your book in an award or for any review, you CANNOT make any changes in the book. If you want to, then you have to take the prior permission of the judge judging your book. You did not take my permission nor informed me and changed your book cover twice. Therefore, I've given you zero for it. The title was very cliché. The story might be good from the inside but many readers judge the title first before choosing to read the story so I suggest you change it. The synopsis was very much intriguing and interesting which made me want to read the book. 

Beginning of a new start :: 10/10

The onset chapters were very much indulging. I liked the suspense built-up. I also liked how you didn't rush the story in order to jump to the next scenes since it's a short story and rather kept a steady pace. 

Concept & Plot :: 20/25

The concept of the story was likable. I've read quite a similar story, not exactly the same, but the baseline was the same so it wasn't something new to me. The good aspect about your story is the effort you put into shaping the mystery and leaving the readers wanting to read it. I liked how you added a sudden and unexpected twist of Taehyung being reincarnated as Jungkook's friend. The thing I mostly loved was the ending. I was definitely expecting some cliché ending where they get a happy ending but damn, you changed it into a neutral ending which was amazing.

Characters & Emotions :: 10/15

Whenever I read a story, I focus more on the character build-up and their sentiments. Your way of portraying the characters' feelings was plain. I didn't feel any sort of emotion while reading the story. There was no depth to it. For the characters, I can see that you tried being creative but ended up applying the same characteristics to them. I hope you try to diffuse unique qualities into your characters. 

Tone & Style :: 8/10

Your way of describing the story was appealing. I liked how you weren't rushing the plot and taking things slowly by explaining everything in detail. Your writing style was also very nice. The paragraphs weren't too short nor too long, just the right amount of lines. The transition from one scene to another was sleek, especially the flashbacks were very well depicted. The toning of the story was a bit unsatisfying because the book took place at only one place; the carnival. It's understandable since the ghost cannot come out of the carnival but it can get pretty boring because readers desire certain changes to imagine each scene as a scenario in their head which also leads the overall story to be enhanced as well as makes the readers feel the story. 

Grammar :: 18/20

I liked your grammar. The words used weren't plain. I detected rich words also being used which helped in developing the story some more. I also liked how you used a descriptive writing style wherever required and did not exaggerate certain scenes. Absence of colons and semicolons was located in a few areas. 

I hope my judging was fair enough. :)

TOTAL ::  78/100.