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The Murder of Hoseok

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The Murder Of Hoseok
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Author :: sugashadow23

Reviewer :: Taebaetae74

First Impression :: 13/20

» Cover :: 7/10
The cover’s theme did not match the title, in my opinion. It should’ve had a darker theme. The current one is too simple and bland. As for the fonts, it really depends on the cover and as of now could be improvised a tad bit more. Maybe if you made the cover’s theme darker, it would fit.

» Title :: 4/5
From what I’ve read, the current title fits the book a lot. But, it would be good if you did not reveal the theme within the title itself. You could’ve made it less obvious, but it’s fine.

» Blurb :: 2/5
Nope. Did not do the job. There’s no problem with one-sentence-descriptions. But, when you do that, make sure it’s entrancing enough. If I were to stumble upon this book, I would most likely skip it due to the lack of description.

Beginning of a new start :: 8/10

According to what I’ve read in the first chapter, you need to improve the book’s structure. Moving on to your writings, you could’ve made the chapters a tad bit lengthier. There were some errors in the sentence constructions too. For instance, in the first chapter’s first paragraph, you say that Jimin shakes his head as a means of saying no. This sentence is grammatically incorrect. It should’ve been something like “Jimin shook his head instead of saying something, so as to make no noise.” Other than this, I think it was very good. The chapters were very ‘entrancing’ in a sort.

Concept & Plot :: 23/25

Yep. Loved it. Of course, there might be books out there with almost the same plot, but the way you carried it out was very appreciative. I especially loved the way you ended chapters and began them. But like I said, you need to add more descriptive scenes. Add in more details. Try making it less bland. Expand important scenes with descriptive writing. Not too much, of course, but not too little either.

Characters & Emotions :: 11/15

The characters are just fine. I do not have to say anything about it since this is your book and according to me, you’ve done a good job in executing each character’s spotlight. So, let’s move on to the emotions you have conveyed so far.
To be honest, I did not feel most of it. The ‘plot’ was entrancing, but the ‘chapters’ weren’t. I will explain why in the topic below. But for now, you have to know that this is very important. When your writing style creates an emotional bond with the respective reader, it enhances the quality of the book, regardless of its plot. So you need to improvise here.

Tone & Style :: 7/10

Now, the whole thing you need to pay attention to while writing is that you should go in depth. Of course, this doesn’t mean that you should push in details and descriptive scenes here and there, but, add in some characteristic details when plot-building scenes come- in brief, relevant scenes. In most of the places, you failed to do that- which is why I couldn’t feel many of the emotions you were trying to convey. Excluding this, I did not find any errors as such in your writing style. So, keep going.

Grammar :: 17/20

You do not have any problems with your tenses, nor do you have issues with speech. The main error I noticed was in some of the sentence constructions and usage of punctuations. Regarding the sentence constructions, there were not many errors of course, but there were some- like those I mentioned under the second category. About the punctuations, it’s mainly just the commas. At some places, you failed to use them and at some parts, you used them at the wrong points.
Next, we’ll talk about vocabulary. It was good, but not too strong. Nevertheless, I liked it because you have a beautiful way with your words. Not too simple, but not too complicated either. I just feel that at some points, use less common words- just to impress the readers and do the trick.

TOTAL :: 79/100