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Author :: M0NSTAD1CK

Reviewer :: Author_Jenny

First Impression :: 5.5/20

» Cover :: 0/10

The cover was changed four times. But the time I reviewed the book it was just a black cover so the marks had been given accordingly. You should understand how difficult it is for a reviewer to change their reviews again and again while you change the cover however you want to suit your aesthetics. I am not saying that you can't, it's your book, your account, you are free to do whatever you feel like but I think you can at least control your aesthetics for a week while your book was already mentioned in the batch. How difficult is that?

» Title :: 3/5

The title has a connection with the story and I see how it can be the title of the book but I have to also accept the fact that it seems vague. Just as we look at the title, it doesn't seem to be connected to the story although it is when we continue reading. This can confuse the reader, instead of picking an event or scenario of the story to be the title, you can go for the complete theme of the story. A title that is relevant and compliments the complete plot of your story. The event that you took the inspiration from in order to give the title the required impact.

» Blurb :: 2.5/5

The blurb seemed decent enough although it was in lower case which would have been okay if you would have mentioned that it was intended. The blurb starts with a 'comma' which I assume was done for aesthetics. Using aesthetics is okay as long as you don't mess up the basic punctuation rules. Also the strikethrough over the dialogues felt unnecessary to me. 

Beginning of a new start :: 8/10

The first few chapters seemed pretty decent to me, a good point was it wasn't unnecessarily stretched before the female protagonist finds out about the app. Everything happened pretty quickly although I feel like before the app was installed, it would have been better if the female protagonist had debateful thoughts about installing the app rather than installing it right away. This would have made the situation more realistic. 

Concept and plot :: 17/25

The concept would have been unique a few years ago but if we talk about right now, it isn't. There are several Social Media AUs coming up every now and then. The story was well described but I feel like the story was slightly fast paced. I understand the fact that you don't want to bore out your readers but I feel like the situations can be better explored. Talking about how the book reflects the genre then I have no complaints with it. Being a Social Media AU, it is heavily based on text messages as it should and as events and situations every now and then. The book seems incomplete as the two protagonists have not been together but I hope that won't be a problem once you publish book two.

Characters and emotions :: 14/15

From the very beginning I felt like the way the characters were portrayed was enough to tell about their personalities. One of the advantages of writing in this trope is that through the text messages, it is easy to understand a character's personality. The texts and the dialogues told us a lot about the character and I think it is a good point. The dialogues were appropriate to the situations, the character's actions and reactions were relatable.

Tone and style :: 7/10

Your descriptive writing is quite impressive, although there were parts where I felt like the situations were over explained, it can make your writing look monotonous which can result in the reader losing interest. I also noticed unlike other Social Media AUs where the author's actually type out the messages, you have posted pictures of the chats which is completely alright but there is a disadvantage. You must be familiar with the fact that wattpad has two reading modes, online and offline, you can't view any media while you are reading offline.

Now think that if a reader downloaded your book so that they could read it offline, they won't be able to view the media. This will create a type of restriction. They have to be online in order to read your book, I hope you can see how the restriction is created here. But if you had typed out your texts, offline or online wouldn't have been an issue to begin with. 

Grammar :: 16/20

Apart from the punctuation mistakes I had mentioned earlier in your blurb I couldn't find many grammatical mistakes of any kind. Just remember to not use punctuations for aesthetic purposes.

Total :: 67.5/100