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The cover gave off a very soothing vibe. It wasn't very crowded nor too bland. I loved the foggy effect you used for the font. But in my opinion, the picture used of Taehyung could've been something else, for example only a picture of the piano or Taehyung with a piano (which is available on google) to sum up the overall story into one picture. The current picture of Taehyung in the cover also ain't bad since it looks as if he's lost in his thoughts while looking at the sky above. Also, it isn't necessary to put up Taehyung's picture on the cover, even a simple piano or some anime picture of a person playing the piano could've worked.
The title matched very well with the story. It was simple yet elegant and definitely summed up the baseline of the story. It also gave importance to the object which kept the main leads attached in the story.
The blurb was on-point. I really loved how you wrote a very unique and different summary of the story instead of adding dialogues or anything that could potentially leak the plotline. It didn't reveal too much of what's in the story. Again, it was simple yet beautifully written.
Beginning of a new start :: 10/10
The onset chapters were quite indulging. I really loved the concept you applied in each chapter. The chapter titles were carefully used in each chapter along with its meaning. I never once felt bored because your way of explaining their childhood using the piano terms as the main base left me impressed. I also loved how each scene and chapter title was neatly depicted; the planning of each chapter was thoroughly done which is a good aspect because many authors tend to not go with the flow and end up writing stuff they don't like and eventually end up disrupting the plot.
Concept & Plot :: 22/25
The concept of the story was heartfelt and precise. You had one aim in mind while writing the story, that is to show readers to learn to let go and move on no matter how bitter it is. I loved how you didn't make the main leads end up together, instead you reminisced their childhood memories through Taehyung's POV which was very well written by the way.
For the plot, I had mixed feelings about it because as cliché as it seemed, your way of portraying the story covered the cliché parts. However, I liked the idea of how you allowed the main leads to have a final closure by sending Taehyung to her wedding before they could actually move on and live their lives. I did find it odd how Iseul invited Taehyung to her wedding despite having no contact with him for so many years. It was also very odd how she had expected him to show up at her wedding despite having so many things left unspoken between them. No offence, but I think they should've at least had a talk about their past because that's what closure means, because as soon as the wedding was over, they both separated again. But then again, maybe Taehyung didn't want to ruin her wedding and send her off happily plus this is a fanfic, anything can happen in it lol but originality would've been appreciated.
Characters & Emotions :: 14/15
Whenever I read a story, I focus more on the character build-up and their sentiments. Your way of portraying the characters' feelings was again, very neat. You perfectly portrayed Taehyung's emotions towards the whole ordeal. His emotions during his childhood, his feelings towards Iseul, everything was well displayed. Though I think a look into Iseul's feelings would've been appreciated as well but since the story was mainly and only from Taehyung's POV, I will let it slide.
The characters, well there wasn't much to it because the entire story was revolving around only the two main leads. Their personalities were simple and joyful. I loved how there was a constant understanding between them about anything and everything. The fact that Taehyung didn't hold her back from her dreams and let her go was very touching. Plus he knew that Iseul would go no matter what and she was crying only because she had to leave Taehyung behind. That level of understanding is very hard to find these days. Taehyung never held a grudge against her even though their contact broke. It showed a sense of maturity in his character and how well he maintained it till the very end. Instead of blaming anyone, he learned to let go. I really loved Taehyung's personality in this story because he wasn't portrayed as a cliché character and instead had very unique qualities diffused into him.
Tone & Style :: 10/10
As I mentioned above, your way of describing the story was very marvellous. Each chapter was well planned and carefully written. Your writing style was also on-point. Your descriptive writing and complexity of the language gave life to the story. The paragraphs weren't too short nor too long, just the perfect amount of lines. The transition from one scene to another was sleek.
The toning of the story was satisfying. The events that took place weren't exaggerated or dragged; they were simple yet beautifully shown. Once again, I really loved how you gave each chapter a meaningful title and wrote each chapter keeping that specific title in mind. The flow of the story was smooth like butter (lol).
Grammar :: 19/20
Not many mistakes were detected in this area. Your grammar and vocabulary was crystal clear and each paragraph, sentence, dialogue was carefully thought and jotted down. There were no unnecessary paragraphs/dialogues written to bore a reader and there was absolutely no rush, as if you had taken all the time in the world to plot and write the story. Absence of colons and semicolons was detected in very few places.
I hope my judgement was fair enough. :)
TOTAL = 94/100
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