Please remember that this is just my opinion. You don't have to change anything if you don't want to.
First of all, the cover *chefs kiss*. I love the cover! I don't have anything else to say than I am a slut for it lmao djdhdjd
This will probably a short review because there was nearly nothing fixable in your book. The way you described everything in detail was so good. I loved how you put the tiniest details in everything. But the issue is that too much of a good thing is bad. Even though most of the time detailed writings help us visualize way better, there are some cases where extreme amount of details bore the readers. Keeping them short will be in your advantage. Don't forget it!
The only other thing I can suggest you is to change the words. I saw that many of the words are a bit advanced level and hard to read. Especially for readers whose first language is not English, like me, your book is kinda hard to read and confused me most of the time. Maybe changing some of the words to easier options will help your readers to understand the events!
