Please remember that this is just my opinion, and you don't have to change anything if you don't want to :)
I took points off the first one because there wasn't really a blurb. All it said was A short story about Elijah's wish to visit the stars. Yes, it does explain what the story is about, it just doesn't really pull the reader in. But don't feel bad. It's hard to write a really good blurb, something I haven't mastered yet :)
Your spelling and grammer was very spot on. I didn't spot many mistakes. I did comment what I felt you should change.
There wasn't much to describe, but when there was, you did good.
I understand that it's hard to make a good plot in short stories, but you didn't do too bad :D
I felt that it was quite origional, and a good flow of the story.
Sorry my review isn't longer, it's just there wasn't much to review.
