Please remember that this is just my opinion, and you don't have to change anything if you don't want to.
This was an okay story. The cover, title and blurb were pretty good, the flow was decent, and I actually liked how original this was. Plot, detail, grammar and spelling weren't the best, eh, it's quite difficult to be the best, or even one of the best.
Going over the grammar and spelling would help, and maybe including a little more in-the-moment action. Overall, an okay story. Could use some improvement, though.
