I just want to say, I love the blurb. It instantly made me want to read more. The title also fit the book well.
Grammar/Spelling - 9.5/10
Spelling is something that people very rarely get 100% right, and you were very close! I saw a few mistakes, but it wasn't often.
Detail - 9/10
You did very good with the details, but the only thing you should do to make it better, is add more details to the surroundings. That way, the reader will be able to imagine not just the people, but also where they are.
Plot - 10/10
Awesome job on the plot! It was interesting to read, and you made it capture my attention from the very beginning!
Originality - 4.5/5
This was very different than most things I've read.
Flow of the Story - 5/5
The flow was very good. It wasn't too far, but it also didn't go at a snails pace.
Overall Enjoyment - 4/5
Total - 46/50
I'm sorry that it took me a long time to write this. But great job overall!!!!
