First of all, these are just my personal opinions. Please don't feel discouraged. And no hard feelings! Let's begin!
Okay I will be honest. From Grammar errors to lot's and lot's of punctuation errors, there were many mistakes in the book. The best suggestion I can give for you is to unpublish the book and rewrite it grammatically correct. There are many sentences where you started in lowercase even after finishing a sentence or starting a new paragraph. Please take a closer look at the punctuation errors too!
