Author: Dipanwita86
Reviewer: simrangharge
Title/Titre : (7/10)
The title goes well with the storyline but it could have been better since it's not just about desire but it's more about unconditional love, Protection and Revenge.
Cover/Couverture : (5/10)
Cover doesn't mach with the storyline. The problem isn't with the edit, it just doesn't connect with your story . Since you already have the face to the characters and as they are very popular ones , you could have used their faces in the cover to attract more audience belonging to the fandom.
Blurb/La Description : (7/10)
The description is well written, it has some mystery and proper description of the plot to catch the attention of the readers. Just that it's too lengthy, shorten it a bit and show Khushi's life along with the sheetal's in one part of the paragraph. Otherwise it's good.
Storyline/Scénario : (8/10)
It is a very interesting plot with all the mystery, planning, Revenge, payback and Love. So far the scenes have unfolded very well.
Dialogue/Expression : (6/10)
While reading I felt that the dialogues are often beating around the bush and unnecessarily extended without coming straight to the point. That's the only flow I couldn't let go or else others are negligible.
Creativity/originality(La créativité/Originalité) : (7/10)
I liked how everything was properly planned and executed since the marriage. Yeah much of a ekta plot and not very uncommon but the fact that it was executed well with less drama made it tolerable.
Overall engagement/Engagement global : (6/10)
Once again like mentioned the only noticeable flaw is the stretching of a scene for a long time with some unnecessary distractions rather than just coming straight to the point. But overall Arshi scenes were well written .
Grammar/Grammaire : (7/10)
Grammar is okay with very less errors here and there.
Characters/Personnages : (8/10)
All the characters fulfill their purpose right from the main characters, supporting characters and to the villians.
Flow/Couler : (7/10)
The flow of the story is fine, just take care of the point mentioned above or else everything is good.
Reviewer Opinion :
Overall it's a good story with lot of potential if it's edited a bit according to the mentioned suggestions. I also felt that the confrontation scene where Arnav tells the entire back story to Khushi of what really happend could have been written in just one chapter rather than extending that to 3-4 chapters and later on you could have shown Khushi's reaction to it since the readers already know the entire truth, reading the same thing in 3-4 chapters after waiting for the updates is little boring.
Keep this points in your mind while writing the rest of the story it would make the story more exciting.
Total - (68/100)
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