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Isolabella Serefina Aurum

Submitted by: @1PrettyLittlePsycho  

Reviewed by: thief_queen

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Fandom or Original Work: Harry Potter

Name: Isolabella Serefina Aurum
Personally, I love her first name! (I love everything Italian,) but if that's going to be her middle name, it should be spelled Serafina (more Italian) as Serephina is more commonly known to be Hebrew. Her name is very grand.

Age: Twelve in her First Year (She's in Harry's year, born 8th October, 1979)

Race: She's part Italian, part Scottish

Background: Belle's step-father was murdered by her mother Rhea, who covered it up well, right in front of her and Marcus (her older brother) Because of that tragic day, she was one of the few that could see Thestrals at Hogwarts. Rhea then began treating Isolabella wrong and unfairly, sometimes abusing her physically

When it was time for her Sorting, the Hat didn't have a tough decision. She came from a family of Slytherins and Ravenclaws. She possessed more Slytherin traits and got Sorted into the House of the Serpents. There were rumors that her mother was insane and that she was just the same, so she only earned a few scattered claps. Her brother was the first Gryffindor in the family, so he was upset she was in Slytherin. He was afraid she'd turn out like their mother and ignored her for a while, but soon realized she was better than stereotypical Slytherins. For the most part.
Honestly, it's quite a bit cliché to have a murdered parent and an abusive one (especially here on Wattpad) so I'm not quite sure I like that background information as I don't see it pertaining to the plot.

Sexuality: Bisexual

Friends: Fred & George Weasley, Draco Malfoy (After 3rd Year's winter break), Luna Lovegood, Neville Longbottom
Aww, I love that she's not exactly friends with the Golden Trio! I'm glad she's friends with the Weasley twins and Malfoy.

Significant Other: No one right now

Appearance: Layered black hair down to the small of her back, brown eyes, olive skin, freckles across her nose that are easy to miss if you don't pay attention.
Cute!

Distinguishing Features: She gets a scar on her right eyebrow after getting into a wand fight with Harry (Long story).
Woah... they're enemies? I LOVE THIS STORY EVEN MORE.

Habits: Twirls her wand between her fingers when thinking, taps her foot a lot.

Mental Illnesses: Schizophrenia. I've been doing research and have a friend with it who's helping me and gives me pointers when I write scenes about it. I know people tend to romanticize mental illnesses, so I'll try not to.
Then I'm very excited to see how you portray her!

Self-Confidence Level: Depends on the situation. Though she can be cocky if it gets too high.
As with most Slytherins... (and I'm allowed to say that as I am a Slytherin.)

Ruled by emotion or logic: 60% Emotion, 40% Logic

Introvert or Extrovert: Ambivert. She does like being around people, but she also enjoys the quiet.

Strengths: She listens to others as best she can, Potions, DADA, she's honest, her ambition can do her good at times, her humour (she loves pranking people)

Weaknesses: Working well with people, her ambition can also get her in trouble, mentions of her step-father, focusing, she second guesses herself, sometimes she can't people's emotions so she can upset someone without meaning to and not even know it, her curiosity.
Personally, I love that she can't really understand other people's emotions, it'll lead to a lot of conflict in the story (which is a good thing.)

Constructive Criticism: Personally, as I said earlier, I don't like the whole murdered step-father thing. Like, why wouldn't she tell a professor once she gets to Hogwarts? Granted, I can understand the insane mom thing, as it could help with plot, but there's a few plot holes, so I'd try to fix those up a bit.

Intrigue: 84%