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Eclipse

Submitted by: @Ailila-chan

Reviewed by: thief_queen

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Name: The Eclipse (This is a title and will be explained in her backstory)
I haven't seen a character with this name, so I'm intrigued.

Plot: Acts as one of the most feared members of the Masks, and later, a primary character.

Age: 400~    Physically 15
What an oldie.

Race: Her father is from the Moon island and her mother is from the Sun island, thus making her a hybrid. (Yes, this is unusual.)

Background: [This is takes place in a world called Rigathe]

I mentioned that being a hybrid of two celestial races is unusual. Being part of a celestial race is rare in the first place as they were isolated from the mainland and have a population about only eight thousand. The reason why they isolated themselves was because they were scared of the wars that were happening on mainland between the other main eight elements (Water, Fire, Lightning etc.).

When the Council saw that Eclipse possessed both powers of the Sun and Moon (A hybrid of two would usually have one), they decided to make her the Protector of the two islands, in case anyone found them. Eight people, each of the different main elements, were kidnapped. Using forbidden magic, their magic powers were forced into Eclipse, giving her the ability to use other elements in the process. At the age of 15 (This is adulthood in Riagathe), she was given immortality so as could defend the islands for eternity.
Hmmm, nice background.

She proved to be a good Protector and because she was a hybrid, she was given the title "the Eclipse" by the people.

The method the Council used to keep her in the islands was praising her and telling her how much the people needed her. Instead, she developed an opposite mentality: "I'm the Eclipse, I can do whatever I want!"

So she left for the mainland. There, she made a few friends, who unfortunately got killed due to her overconfidence. She found herself wandering alone from kingdom to kingdom as she was too ashamed to return to the two islands. It was then, a Mask found her and recruited her.
I have no idea what a Mask is.

Talents: Magic in general

Sexuality: Straight

Significant Other: NA

Appearance: A loose-fitting beige dress. Has dark, curly hair that reaches up to her waist and purple eyes. In battle, she will wear dark armor on top and head armor.
Ooo, I like her hair.

Distinguishing Features: Her eye colour as only the people of the Moon have it.

Habits: Likes finding magical artifacts that often come with ability boosts

Self-confidence Level: She has become more self-confident than before, but is still wary of her limits.

6/10

Ruled by emotion or logic: 70% emotion 30% logic
Oh dang, emotion is ruling over the head, I'd love to see her decisions.

Introvert or Extrovert: Ambivert

Strengths: Very powerful magic

Weaknesses: Cannot handle a 1v1 fight as most of her spells have a preparation time, very weak at close-range
Is this a game... what the heck is going on.

Extra Notes: In the book, she lives with eight other people who are also talented, thus her being over-powered does not make her stand out.

Constructive Criticism: Ok, first of all, I have no clue what is going on. I thought this was for a book, and it appears as though it's for a video game. So I don't even know where to begin.

Intrigue: 60% because I have no idea what's going on.