OC Reviews [CLOSED]

Lillie "Seven"

Submitted by: woofTales

Reviewed by: thief_queen

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Original story

Name: Seven/Lillie
Nice name.

Plot: The world has been taken over by a very deadly plague that is killing millions. The world except for America is in anarchy, and America is only like this because they are keeping a very tight grip on their citizens. As the plague started to spread, American scientists started experimenting to create genetically modified humans that were immune to the disease. Since they were being treated badly at the lab they escaped and stowed away and made it to the UK where they are hiding now.
I like the plot! Personally, I don't think that they would want to escape to another country that's in anarchy, the experiments at the lab would have to be very very bad.

Background: (I'm assuming that means backstory) her father was a scientist and he and her mother had a very loving and stable relationship. He also loved his daughter very much and wanted nothing more than to be a happy family. However, the plague came and took Lillie's mother. Not wanting this to happen to the only part of his family he had left, her father made sure that she was one of the people who was genetically modified. Before that, she was very intelligent and good in school with things like science and math. However, she has always been rather blank slate and has trouble expressing emotions, as well as preforming creative tasks. This draws people away from her, and she was teased for it, so she decided she was not meant to be with people, and became quiet and introverted. She must interact with the other numbers so that they can survive together, and that combined with the fact that she isn't good with people can lead to some interesting situations.
Dang, I bet.

Talents/skills: very good at logical things, even sometimes called a genius. Very good at blending into the background, which is good in this  world if you want to survive.
Very true.

Sexuality: Female, Asexual

Significant other: none

Distinguishing features: her beat up glasses

Mental illnesses: none

Self confidence: 6.5
So about pretty average.

Emotional or logical: completely logical
... so, a sociopath. Which would have to change her mental illnesses from none to sociopath.

Introvert or extrovert: introvert

Strengths: very smart, can be intimidating, fast thinker, can blend into background (not literally)
How is she intimidating? To me it contradicts being an introvert and preferring to blend into the background.

Weaknesses: had trouble showing emotions, bad at creative tasks, doesn't work well with people.
Makes sense for her character.

Extra notes: I've had this oc for a very, very, long time. It went from Minecraft to original to undertale to original to what we have now. They are probably one of my first ocs, and they have a very special place in my heart!

Constructive Criticism: Hmm, not too much for me to comment on. I think I'd have to say the intimidating bit, I'd probably change that. Side note: Lillie being borderline sociopathic and very introverted seems quite cliché(?) for the situation she's in. I really don't know how to explain it, do any of my other readers kind of know what I'm talking about? If you comment, make sure your criticism is CONSTRUCTIVE, not hurtful.

Intrigue: 74%, because of that bit I can't quite put my finger on.